Well, I have to say that I didn't really enjoy this story. It was not realistic or in character. And where are the details? I always thought that Edward and Bella's love making would be more about love than about sex.

Also, you should check your grammer before you post a story.

Okay, there's a few problems with this ExB fic:
1. Bad grammer
2. Extremely out-of-character
3. Bad plot
4. UNREALISTIC

Very hot story about Bella and Edward I really love it lol,lol

wow that was steamy
i like i like:)
lil' Kari

u need 2 put in more deatals! about the 3rd paragraph i stoped reading. learn 2 grab and hold your readers atenchen.

Cute and sensual. I loved it. ^-^