Reviews for An Interesting Week

Reviews For: An Interesting Week

Parrot-san 2008-07-09 ch 3,	abuseI like EagleSami better, but you are right, there is no MaxSami! This is pretty good so far. I think it is great that Max rescued Sami!
CO Raven 2008-05-26 ch 3,	abuseWhat I was referring to was not the single anti air infantry by itself but rather the combination of them. Infantry porvide meatshields and endless swarm to overwhelm. Mechs deal with light vehichles like tanks and recons (and heavier vehichles due to swarm) Then your anti-air infantry stop the fighters and bombers from being effective since they're so cheap to build. All are infantry class soldiers and thus get a boost in power. Then the counter infantry swarm gets stopped by Sensei's copters. As long as air is around, Sensei can even win at sea with copters, so the prescence of water won't kill him. So the unit istelf isn't sickeningly good but rather how it covers Sensei's weaknesses without crippling his strategy.
Clockwork time 2008-05-26 ch 1,	abuseOK, just finished the 3rd chapter. I'm not seeing a whole lot going on the vast majority of each of these chapters are just details about the characters. While great detail is always a good thing there appears to be a major lack in story and a total lack of any character development, combined with a few choice typo's and the poor narration such as "as well as tied to a chair with her hand and feet to the chair" This one stuck out quite a bit more than the others because it's redundant stating the same thing twice AND only one of her hands is tied to the chair? About chapter length. In your first story you stated a notice about chapter length however in my opinion that chapter was quite short, what im getting at is there is no need for it people will read 100 pages per chapter if they enjoy the story. Combat? "“Green light to go CO Max, I repeat green light to go.” Max heard over the radio. “Roll, tanks, roll!!” Max shouted. “…um sir, we have no tanks here…” a soldier sweatdroped. “I know that!! I just want…” then Max paused “ok never mind, just go!!” Max shouted. “OO-RAH” all soldiers in the area replied and the APC’s and Recons broke through the gates in the south gate and the Recons fired on the surprised enemy infantry around the base. Then the APC’s passed the recons and past some more soldiers and stopped in front of the door of the HQ. The infantry and mechs got out of the APC’s and guarded the entrance and Max, with a rifle in his hands, bull rushed to the double doors to break it down with his massive body." To me this is confusing, are they like 30 feet from the enemy HQ entrance? While you discribe characters in great detail your actions seqeuences leave much to be desired. A seperate note being you never discribe the BH forces only that they are getting beat down. Anyway my advice worthless or not is to take more time with each chapter, and show some of that detail with your combat. Paint us a picture with words show us the battle the stuggle for there lives between Orange Star commando's and Black Hole soldiers. Anyway it's always good to see people hard at working keeping my favorite game section alive and well, keep up the work show us why this is an interesting week
CO Raven 2008-05-23 ch 2,	abuseWell this seems to be well thought out. But here's why there's no anti-air infantry in the game: Sami and Sensei would kill everybody. Sensei's copers would no longer fear fighters, and Sami would be able to counter air force unlike how she usually had problems with them as her anti-airs weren't great.
CO Raven 2008-05-21 ch 1,	abuseI wouldn't say that its too long. Description is good, and I've seen 10+ word chapters. (And they tend to be the best stories)

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