I just got finished with chapter one and I must say this story has me quite intrigued. I can see how this could have been one of the alternate story lines, because it fits like a puzzle piece. I wonder what the rest will be like...

Lol, Lloyd will never get away from studying xD.

I'll be waiting for the next chapter

Whoa! Sorry I haven't reviewed the last couple chapters! I cound have sworn that I had... Well, for all the chapters that I haven't reviewed, AWESOME! Can't wait to keep reading more Cruxis-Lloyd!

YAY you updated! I'm so happy! This chapter was pretty good, I didn't notice any gramatical mistakes. All hail Lord Lloyd (it makes me happy)! Poor Lloyd and all the work he has to do... Can't wait for the next update!

this review was supposed to be for chapter six but i caught a typo when i was refreshing myself on the storyline. In chapter two where it says:

Yes; it happens later on. Now where was I… Ah yes… You see, I was on Sylvarant for some time checking over the Desian Ranches when I saw Kvar terrorizing a family. It was a small family: a couple, a son and a daughter.” Kratos stopped temporarily to see if the boy was actually listening.

You forgot to put opening quotation marks for Kratos' dialogue. But chapter six was great, their relationship is really coming along and the storyline is still keeping me wondering whats going to happen next. Keep it up, this is good!

Hm...can't spot any grammar errors, though one thing that interests me is that when Lloyd said 'I'm angrier I was right' Kratos didn't seem curious about that at all. I mean, Lloyd wasn't supposed to have a clue to that, right? Hm...or maybe I'm just overanalyzing it. (shrug)

Hee hee, Lloydie has to do homework XD

O... sinister. This chapter gave me the chills. Well kind of. I was a little confused at the beginning, but i figuired it out doon enough. How is Yggdrasill managing to brainwash Lloyd whilst he sleeps? I can't wait for your next update!

Yeah-ah! I was staring at this story on my alert list and starting thinking 'when will they update?' and then I checked my mail, and you did! :D

Awesome chapter. The hypnotic (sp? can't spell today -_-') phrases were awesome. I liked Lloyd's thoughts on them.

One thing though, I don't know if there's another way to spell it but I thought aide (as you spelt it) was spelt A-I-D. But idk, I'm not that smart. -_-'

Update soon?

-SilverMoon8

Me: JESUS!

Lloyd: Where? O.O

Haha, it does look like you had fun with the first phrases. :D

Slowly corrupting Lloyd's mind through hypnosis. A cruel, yet effect method. Poor Lloyd D

Till next time.

NO! NO! LLOYD! FIGHT IT! T.T NO LLOYDIE!

n.n Though it is so delightfully evil...X3

...Hopefull 'Switch' will be next...? (shifty eyes)

H-hypnopaedic? Is that a word? It doesn't show up on my spell check...

Still, Lloyd is becoming evil, yay! I've always liked the idea of an evil Lloyd. But what will happen to the others, hmm...?

My one problem is that Kratos feels a little out of character. I don't know exactly what it is about him but, well, it just feels a tad off, if you know what I mean.

I will be certain to read the next chapter upon the next update.

This story is really good do far. I would recomend that you add more details in some instances, but otherwise it's awesome. I can't wait for the finished product. _

It's a really great story, but I have a problem with the way Kratos speaks. Even though Lloyd is his son, I don't think Kratos would be nearly as soft hearted as your dialogue makes him out to be.

SKLEE! (Hugs) I love the wingiess...n.n' Good job :D

Um, I'm not saying the story is bad or anything but I just have these questions: 1) What's happened to Collete, and furthermore, why hasn't she been mentioned since Mithos called her in Ch. 1? 2) Was Mithos lying about the rest of the party being killed to influence Lloyd? ( Note: I use Mithos cuz it's quicker to spell than Yggdrasil). Curiosity is screaming blue bloody murder in my head.