Reviews for On The Periphery

Reviews For: On The Periphery

Maxiekat 2008-07-21 ch 2,	abuseSoda is wonderful in this chapter - so earnest and eager to help out. I love it and I love his plan. And you do a great job of keeping Darry and Steve three dimensional and likeable without losing their core character traits. I don't know if that made sense, lol. I guess what I mean is that they aren't charicatures of "Darry the stern guy" and "Steve the jerk" - they're real people. And I really like how you're exploring Jane as she adjusts to America. Her part of the chapter has a nice feel to it and it's a completely different tone than the other part of the chapter. Great Job :)
Queen Jane Approximately 2008-07-16 ch 2,	abuseI'm loving this more and more, AI. I think you're doing a wonderful job. You've got such a great handle on the canon characters, and you're showing us sides of them and their lives that most fic authors fail to recognize, but on the other hand you're introducing Jane and her family (all of whom I really like, by the way) into this world really nicely too, and nothing clashes or sounds weird or out of place. It's perfect! Lol, I really think that. I loved the contrast between the American and the British ways of life. You do a really fantastic job of showing how different they are with subtle references to the culture without spelling it out for everyone. I can totally tell you've done research on what things are like in America, too. I also really like your characterization and I can tell you pay close attention to it. Darry, Soda, and Steve sound so authentic and real. Oh, and I love that you mentioned mods -- assuming you meant the same ones I'm thinking of. I could be wrong, lol. But I figured you meant the style in the Sixties -- I know it originated in England, and it's one of my favorites. Such awesome clothes and hairstyles. I've always wanted to go back in time and be a part of the Swinging London scene, lol. Anyway, awesome chapter. I really enjoyed reading it and I can't wait for more. :) Peace, Sarah :)
mars on fire 2008-07-16 ch 2,	abuseI think my favourite thing about this chapter was how the parts with Soda, Darry and Steve were so American with the dialogue, the usage of words etc, then the minute we're in Jane's world it's completely British. This is something that other writers (in any fandom) should pay close attention to when they write characters from countries other than the States. It flows so well, and you get such a good sense of who Jane is just from her use of British words.
AddictionToFiction 2008-07-16 ch 2,	abuseWell done so far. Looking forward to seeing more! :]
Hahukum Konn 2008-07-16 ch 2,	abuseHeavens! A realistic "foreign OC meets the gang" fic? I may die of shock :P Seriously, I liked the work you put in here. I thought you had Darry's thoughts and emotions written quite well. :)
xocrazililkelox 2008-05-22 ch 1,	abuseI really enjoyed this story,It's diffrent from all the others out there.Jane seems like a pretty intresting charcter.I agree with Mars I think it's pretty cool that your writing about a British charcter as well. All your storeis are so creative.I thought it was cool that you added the gym and gave us a glimpse into Darrys life because it a rare thing to see in a story.Thanks for posting this awsome story.I hope you upadte soon pretty please?
Hawaiichick 2008-05-21 ch 1,	abuseWow...what a great start. A lot is going on, but I like how realistic this is. The correct slang dialouge for the 60s and even the details of Jane's presence. She is real and not just a mary-sue. Love how you wrote Darry and his inner thoughts. Can't wait for more.
mars on fire 2008-05-21 ch 1,	abuseI really love the focus on Darry and his life. I can see him resenting people a little for the fact that he's in the situation he's in and they can live their lives in a way he can't. I like the humour with Two-Bit too lol. I'm interested to see what will go on with Jane. I am so glad it's you writing a British character, because so many others would make her sound like a freaking idiot in an attempt at being realistic. Less is definitely more - you haven't changed her speech at all, you've just got the characters commenting on her accent - that's all we need to get the idea and imagine it. Not like some stories I've seen ... lol.
Queen Jane Approximately 2008-05-21 ch 1,	abuseI really like this a lot so far, AI. You've got such great, realistic voices going for the characters and I love that much of the focus is on Darry since there just are little to no stories centered around him ... and he does need love, lol. I also liked the shifting between points of view, and I think you did a really nice job with that. It was neither confusing nor over-the-top. I like Jane already (I also love that name, it's one of my favorites), and I'm interested to see why she moved to Tulsa, though I have no doubts that it was for a very logical, realistic reason and I know you'll handle it well. I'm also looking forward to seeing how the greasers' American way of life will clash with hers, and I like that we've already caught some glimpses of that here. I'm looking forward to more. :) Peace, Queen Jane
ohremy 2008-05-21 ch 1,	abuseThis is really fantastic, AI! I enjoy that you're writing about Darry, and that he's a human and not just some angry guy sitting in his armchair waiting for the perfect opportunity to smack Ponyboy around, LOL. You're fleshing him out really well, and it's a really enjoyable read so far! I can't wait to read more. I like Jane, she's very human, and I love that you're bringing an English character into the Outsiders fandom. I think you'll do an exceptional job of it.
Maxiekat 2008-05-21 ch 1,	abuseI'm so happy you're writing a Darry fic. You do such a good job exploring Two-Bit and revealing sides to his character that everyone ignore that I'm excited to see what you do with Darry. He's so complex - so much more than the guy who's strict with Pony, roofs, and reads the paper. You've already got some great observations here - Darry being jealous of his friends, worrying that high school football is going to be the highlight of his life (shades of Friday Night Lights?), and how he struggles to hold himself in check when dealing with the social worker. And what a great idea for a story - a true "fish out of water" story and you're the perfect one to write from the perspective of a Brit trying to fit-in in Tulsa.

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