I really enjoyed this... Fantastic job, I love your writing skills!

Wow. This is so wonderfully written. It's so beautiful in its simplicity, the way you describe the people like a grey maze, avoiding others, saving their own hides, and the two spots of bright colours who just won't be a part of the rest. It's so well done. Roxas as the pick-pocket makes me smile. And I have to agree with A spot of Bother, Axel + glasses makes smexy. Yuss.

I'm still smiling at the thought of Roxas as the grumpy, overly paranoid thief even though it's been twenty minutes since I finished reading. This will certainly stay in my head for a long while, it's refreshing and pretty! Good work!

Hello! Finally over writer's block!emo and catching up on titles that have been sitting in my inbox for forever. I'm opting to do this one as a play by play as I read. I'm tired and rambly. I think you've been sufficiently warned. ;D

First of all: much love for Escaflowne. :D I'll stop being a dork now and actually read the story. XD

Your opening description reminds me why I'm not overly fond of big cities. They're great to visit, but I don't think I could ever live in one. And this:

/You’re an individual, right? You’re unique, you’re special? Right. Shut up and get back to work./

reminds me of my extremely small, bigoted high school. DX

Pick-pocket is by the far most creative way I've seen two people meet in a /long/ time. Kudos for even thinkng of it!

/So he knew I wanted to run. Good. Then he wouldn’t be surprised when I actually did so./ Lines of yours - like this - come out of nowhere and make me grin for no particular reason. Random, but I thought you should know. (And I wondered if Axel was wise to what had happened when he didn't file a report.)

Axel + glasses = sexy, kthnx.

/Loving/ their conversation. You do snark so well, dear.

Again - I do /not/ meet the right kind of people. :( Why is it perfect strangers don't 'attack' me in the street?

...Lovely. I really liked that. I'd give more concrete examples, but I'm tapped. I'm going to bed. I love you and your writing, dear.

RWAR
Absolutely adorable. Your stories are incredible. Makes me wanna have an Axel.

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Aww, it's such a beautiful story. The ending was good and it feels like Axel and Roxas' story continues.
Great writing, keep it up^^

It was cute... in a weird, what the hell just happened kinda way! Great job!

I really love this.

Roxas was amazing and bold and Roxas-y.

The way Axel smiled at the people in the crowd made me want to cry for some reason. Especially when Roxas runs after him.

It's too cute and sad.

And I love it.

Amazing.
Keep it up.
All the best.

this was pretty good...um...are you goin' to right a sequal or continue it in anyway?

So you go out in the country and write about the city...interesting. ^_^ How ironic.

Funny thing - a couple weeks ago I started writing a fic where Roxas steals $200 from Axel at their first meeting...although in a different setting than picking pocket and all but yeah. No lie...complete coincidence. Crazy, huh?? lol ^_^

Anyway, loved this - it was so beautifully described, it really had quite an atmosphere, a tangible one, I think. And I love the nuances of their personalities in this. ^_^

I wish it would continue... :O( Oh, and I don't think I understand why Roxas said the sunset was fake...why was it fake? Do you mean, literally fake?

Oh, and I also liked how it was Roxas' first person POV. It was like, it opened over the city and then narrowed down to his individual thoughts...that could be symbollic. O... ^_^

Another great story. Though I admit that it was very realistic and cute, I have to say that it wasn't your best end. :) Just giving you the truth from my opinion.

Also, that bad habit of 'blonde' is back! Le Gasp! I was a bit annoyed to find that it was there, but I still liked the overall story.

Wow, Blue Funk, you sure are writing! You're the only one out of the authors I have that are actually updating nowadays. Hahah. You have my respect.

>_< Please dont kill me D:;;
You should put another chapter ^.^

That was fantastic and so ordinary -- original and all of those other words.
This was great, and I'm so glad you're on my author alert :D
Because of great stories like this one

i think this is my favourite thing you've ever written.

The setting is beautiful, really unconventional, really...i don't know. i like the images of grey, and of smears of darkness - and that the sunset and their hair colours are the only images of brightness.

~rosemage

Wow. I really enjoyed this story. My city is kinda like that. You can't ever see the sunset because of all the buildings. I love how you had them interact with each other and you got the imagery really precise.