Please update this soon. I find it most interesting.

yee i like. very exciting. unusual storyline.

going to update anytime soon? I'm married and I'm updating mine so you have no excuse :P

Oh more updates! Goody!

Well this has a lot in common with your other story. I´m guessing youré going in a different direction though, with Allora? I hope she can save Zendat!

Ah...The suspense!
Great chapter!

Well done, a brilliant chapter, I can't wait till you update again.

Oh, wow! Wonderful chapter!

Love it. :D

You're inconsistently identifying the Visser--he's referred to as both "One" and "Three" in this chapter! ;-)

Woot! GO Allora!

*Screaming at computer* GO ALLORA! GO! GO! GOGOGO! Note to self: Not so much sugar when reviewing. Anyways...*continues to yell at computer*

Yay! Update. I can't wait to see what you do when it comes the inevitable narrator failure.

Wow...excellent chapter! Long awaited, (lol) suspenseful...

I love it! :D

agh! you are a master of suspense. i can't wait for more.

Ooh, an update! And one that leaves me curious as to the next chapter, though I feel like I've missed something...
Hmm...

anyway, glad to hear about another possible update!

Yay you updated! :)

The dialogue between Alloran and Allora was pretty intense! I like this chapter - I really felt Allora's despair. I hope she regains some hope soon though.

Finally we meet Terenia! An excellent chapter. You've captured Alloran perfectly.