awesome...please update soon!

Yays! (to both updates) I'm all excited and stuff! This one's getting interesting.

What a strange package... huh...

Keep up the good work. *Thumbs are UP!*

Very very interesting plot you've created!
can't wait to read your next chappie
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I love your writing, you are very good i must say ^_^. Love the story, updating soon would add to my personal satisfaction. Not that its your job to worry about that ^_^.

I'm sorry... I feel terrible... I actually didn't know you had updated until I got your note because I'm an idiot who has neglected to actually fav this. It's coming along very well. I can't wait to see how L intends to test her loyalty... and how badly Light's paranoia is going to screw him over. Boy, L sure jumped on him about the internet video thing. Haha

IT'S ABOUT FREAKING TIME.

I like how you gave the attention to Aizawa in this fic, and how Tanaka's role is cautiously tying into the plot. Having an LxOC fic with the OC starting off as Aizawa's associate will make for an interesting dynamic; a lot of LxOCs will have the OC siding with L and everything he does almost immediately, so kudos on the original take here. L's uncertainty and Aizawa's reluctance were really in-character, as was everyone else.

As Ecclaed brought up earlier in the reviews: this story is four chapters in and it's still...well, pretty boring. Don't get me wrong, I appreciate the fact you're taking the plot intensely and introducing new aspects, like the ECKT, slowly, but I'm really hoping for some action with the next chapters. The ending to this one got my heart going in that Death-Note-esque 'omg epic twist is on the way' feeling I get while watching the series, so take the anticipation of the results of this cliffhanger and run with it! I can see you're starting to shake things up here, so keep at it!

I'm wondering if Misa really could be THAT stupid, but hey, maybe you're saving it for something.

PS To get more people to start reading your fic, throw in 'LxOC' somewhere in the summary. That seems to ring in both OC-lovers and Mary-Sue-haters alike.

Update soon or I'll start shipping Light/Tanaka instead.

Best chapter yet! Arcton's a frickin loon and I love it!

I am curious as to who the mysterious deathly thin schemer is... although I DO sort of have an idea from what we discussed before.

I can't wait for more. :)

OH EM GEE. IT'S A B.

Yes, I think you've done a much better job this time around, and I'm attributing this to your recent gain of a co-author. Whatever they're doing, they're doing it awesome.

The display of Light's ego made me laugh out loud, because you just know that's exactly what he's thinking at that point. XD Considering all the emotional focus you gave him in chapter two, I was hoping to see more of L here, but still, it's a very good job. (I guess Ryuuzaki's more of a cake person than a pie person, lol.)

Now, the original characters. Arcton has added a cracky-yet-realistic edge to this thing with his crazy-scary accuracy, and I can't wait to see why he's necessary to this plot. I like how Yoshimi's work-centric personality surfaces in this chapter as well, and the addition of a family life brings out how detached and selfish she really is. One question: when does she start interacting with the major characters from the series? I'm hoping there's a reason for the build-up, because I'm looking forward to reading her relationships with the rest of the cast.

The final section, in my opinion, was the best part of this entire chapter. A-freaking-mazing. It was very cold, very intense, and keeps me wondering what in the world he's planning to do with that woman. The sudden switch in narrative near the end was a little uneasy, but the prose made it hard to notice; just be a bit more careful next time. And stick with the catchphrase! I like it.

Update soon or I'll order an army of Djiboutian rainbow spiders to steal all your psychological horror DVDs.

Awesome job! The plot advanced a little here. There was some potential confusion with there being two Tanakas... but other than that I'd say you could have had a little more in this chapter. That asside It's coming along great, keep it up, yo!

Certainly have a different style this time around; a lot of internalization. That isn't bad, although maybe some more action? Like, when Yoshimi had that internal dialogue with herself she could have also said some of it to the correspondent. It's still fine how it is though, especially if she is a very reserved character.

Internalization is a double edged sword. At times it provides depth to a character, while in certain situations it can give too much depth so that the overall scope of things gets murky or ruins surprises. Especially during action that is sudden or fast, reactions come first and internalization might only happen after the fact.

I like the way you portrayed L as well as how you ended the chapter. "Playing chess on thin ice against a mirror." I liked that line. XD You're very good at leaving the chapter open for the next one!

I have not read the book yet! But I also have not forgotten about it. :P

YES YES THIS IS EXACTLY WHAT I'M TALKING ABOUT. If you take into account his 'Another Note' background, I think you potrayed L perfectly. Yes, he would grieve. Yes, he would hide it from everyone. Yes, he would convert that depression into hidden determination.

"Playing chess on thin ice against a mirror."

I can't describe how much that line hit me.

This chapter was a little OC-heavy, but I'll forgive you since she isn't a goddamned Mary Sue. And I downloaded Toru Takemitsu's Air just for this chapter. Background flute music for the win.

I like the personality you've given Yoshimi. Obviously, she's dead hardcore about her job and has a lot of faith in the NPA. I wonder how she'll take it when she finds out they're dropping Kira from their attention...one thing I don't get, though. If she's 4'10", how can she see over the steering wheel? >D

I had to look back on this manga chapter. I completely forgot Kouki was canon.

And yes, I adored the brief portrayal of Soichiro. It's just so...him.

Aha, I wonder who this mysterious man Yoshimi's trying to contact is? Couldn't be L, seeing as there's a 'head office'...now you've got me wondering.

Update soon or I'll wire a container of C2 to the back of your television and violently blow away any chances of further procrastination.

I thought this story deserved more attention, so yes, I will be reviewing chapters from here on out.

I like your OC so far. It's interesting to see these events from someone in her position, from her point of view. One thing I noticed about Death Note is that all the criminals Kira was getting rid of were portrayed as one-dimensional. No one took into account that they were all once sons, fathers, brothers, of someone. You established this effect nicely.

Although I generally dislike fanfiction that opens up with original characters, you pulled this off better than most attempts I've seen. I advise giving a lot more attention to the canon characters in the next chapters to make up for this, though, to give it that authentic Death Note feel.

Update soon or I'll send a horde of rabid wildebeest to break through your attic window and steal all your corn flakes.

Thanks for explaining that you were planning to do this fic weekly, because I was going to bite your head off for it being so short. >] It's not that length is the most important part, but my brain is spoiled and wants to wade around in text.

1/2 width is win.

"The individual responsible for manufacturing his dissent stood a little over 147 centimeters (point thirty-eight above, to be exact) tall"
ARE YOU BEING SNARKY TO US READERS? XD

“And as you know, we only have one person to blame for that.”
“Kira.”
She winked. “You know it.”

I think that, given the circumstances of there being a dead body at her feet, the wink was especially chilling.

TTGL totally made me associate "aniki" with Kamina. I just hear Simon's voice and see Kamina's grinning face whenever I read it, lol.

One thing is for sure, you have me interested in learning more about who this Tanaka is. =D

Chapter 2, gogogogogo!