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Reviews for: Sorrow
Mysteryfan17 5/20/10 . chapter 1
Man, I'm gonna have to number these somehow so I know what order to read/save them in...I'm a stickler for watching shows or reading stories in order. But this is going to be a puzzle that I will enjoy.
Papersak 5/22/08 . chapter 1
High five for friend-fics. :)

Hum. You've probably heard reviewers say to start a new paragraph after a different person talk before... just reminding you. And like. Stuff. But I'm confused... skimming through your other fics, you used to do lots of nice spacing. Erm. What happened? xD

Pairing-wise, hooray for movie-Lucario. Could just be my opinion, but I never saw him as a wolf. Jackal, definitely... always thought it was part of the dog family so I guess he's a dog, too. But wolves aways struck me as big muscular creatures and Lucario's kinda slim for the title, imo. Again, could just be me.

Pit's characterization was cute. I luff the guy.

I gotta ask... what's special about Pit's aura? Just the fact that he's an angel? I was confuzzled at that part...

Last nitpick, I promise... wouldn't Lucario thank him a little earlier han four months later? It uhm... kinda seems like something you'd do the next day or week tops. Heheh... heh.

I hope some of that helped a little... I did like the story and I thought it was a cute idea. *nods*
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