We've talked before about you not liking Tumnus, and how I am much more like Lucy when it comes to loving him. :) I mostly just felt deeply sorry for him in this story, for being so misguided. I LOVE what you have done with the Stag, as it gives him a character, purpose, and background all his own. Well done.

what a lovely story!! the plotline was so amazing. i really loved it.

Wow you really don't like Tumnus. Not that I blame you for that, but still making him the cause of Narnia's destruction is a bit much, of course he's also the cause of Narnia being restored. I love the way you wrote the Stag, it seems like the way he would act. The little stories he tells are awesome. Good job! =)

Poor Tumnus!!

This is actually rather possible. Hope Lucy never finds out!

I read this quite a while ago and only just now got back to it to review! It was just as enjoyable reading it this time as it was the first time and I love the concept of this oneshot. It flowed excellently and flawlessly with the canon stories and fills in the blanks with a really great idea. I loved reading this and thought it was beautifully written. Great job! ;)

Wow.

I read this (reread actually...I recognized it and realized I'd read it before) after reading ilysia's "Whose End is Destruction." Both her story and this one give the White Stag some much-needed dimension.

I loved everything about this story, so it's hard for me to say exactly what I like about it! I loved the Stag's wisdom.

Your Tumnus seems to always be putting his hoof in his mouth or doing something very foolish--all because he's focused too much on himself and his problems. Tumnus was never one of my favorite characters anyway, but I feel like I'm actually starting to dislike him after reading your portrayal of him! Do you have strong feelings against Tumnus, or is this just how he turns out in your stories? :)

Thanks for writing! :)

interesting

I think that this was written very well. Good job!

You really don't like Tumnus do you? LOL, though least they get to go back because of him. Poor Tumnus, he should have made his wish more exact, 'I want them returned RIGHT NOW', oh well. Kinda sad story, makes you want to bash Tumnus's head in a bit...
Thanks for writing.
Wildfire

Ouch. I almost feel sorry for Tumnus, for inadvertently causing the downfall of Narnia for over a thousand years. Must be hard burden to bear.

Nice story!

I knew it! It's Tumnus' fault. Hn!

That was very cool E. Poor Tumnus, now the guilt will eat away at him. :(

Wow...very deep and thought-provoking. The story of Mir the Naiad was so heart-rendingly sad. I really wasn't expecting the ending - Tumnus' wish causing the Telmarine invasion and rule of Narnia, thus ushering in Prince Caspian. I do feel sorry for poor Tumnus, though, having to live with the knowledge of what was going to happen and the guilt of it all.

That's almost like Moses and the children of Israel having to wander the desert for forty years- until all of the disobedient ones had died. But the next generation was allowed to enter...prolly no what you were aiming for...but still :)

Very ingenious and it fits perfectly into the plot. I have no idea how you come up with this sort of stuff. I applaud you. This is going on my favourites.