Keep going! The scenic structure sometimes comes off as unhappily jagged, but your writing more than makes up for it and the plot is really interesting :)

aww! no more?!
that's Balthier (er... Ffamran i mean) right? He has a double in the suit and is now wandering around undetected-that's brilliant, and he would so do that wouldn't he? good work, but please! get out more soon! the suspense!

Kya! That was Ffamran, wasn't he?! Oh please update soon! I can't wait to see how you're going to make Ffamran/Ashe to work with Resler around...

I came across this today and enjoyed reading it. I would love to see what the next chapter brings!

Ah, you vanished off LJ! If this is the cliffhanger it works (especially the last sentence) as an image, also as foreshadowing metaphor (of intimacy) AND as a crisply written structure that teases with potential for more. Drop me a PM or email if you want to discuss more.

I still adore this and where it's leading. So sharp, so right, so powerful. Especially for an AU, that you do it so well with few words is amazing.

Oh you have to seriously consider expend this into a full complete series. The plots were so exciting. Please consider. Can't wait for Ashe and Ffamran interactions...

AHH! this soo amazing! How come there arn't more reviews here? Forgive me, for not reviewing this earlier, but I've been a tad busy (I suppose i just answered my own question.) But I got to it!
This is such a tantalizing idea! So brilliant! It has such a unique flare to that not maby people capture in stories. I love the brief journal like third person entries here, perfect! This could be original almost! The idea is just soo... fantastic, please don't stop!

I love this idea SO much. Ffamran falling in love with Ashe...WOW, I am very interested with the plots that you're about to bring us...

Great chapter, I would complain about the length but that is actually what I admire most about this story. The ability to tell a story through only a few short paragraphs is not something everyone has , although I suspect it is the reason you have received so few reviews, people don't like to use their imaginations :)

I especially like the first line of this chapter, while initially confusing and misleading it goes on to be explained in a very succinct and fitting manner. That is too say, very fitting for this character.

Good work, I look forward to reading more.

Al.

I'm loving this story so far. I like the way the characters have been incorporated despite the story line being drastically changed. Will you plan to have all the main characters take a strong role in the story? (such as Fran, for example) Hope you continue with this because it really is a good concept (in my opinion anyway). I find FFXII in particular very open to AU interpretation.

Also it's well written, which is hard to find and too often sloppy or bad writing ruins a good concept.

Thanks for the great read.

Al.