Yeah, tennisnohime was right. Lotsa big words, but that's what made the story really interesting. I liked how you portayed their relationship, it's really a complicated yet somehow simple one, in my opinion. (Am I still making any sense? XP) But then, isn't that why we all love Rikkai D1? It was a good, no, great story. :D

oh wow! it was super well written. You did a great job describing the characters! Lots of big words that most people wouldn't understand, but those words made the story more vivid to see in your mind. Great job! I love Yagyuu and Niou!