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| silverbirch 2008-05-23 ch 1,  | abuseYeah, it was quite good. I'm glad you brought in the "Uncle Ron" bit, because it was starting to sound like a re-run. Ending? Not sure. I think you would have needed to make it longer, perhaps using Al to try and smooth the way for them. |
| yellow 14 2008-05-23 ch 1, | abuseThis is good actually. Fairly funny to. |