Wow! Look at this - a fic in second person! I'm thrilled, as I've been looking for one of these and haven't found one yet. AND it's well-written AND (clincher) it's about Indy and Marion! You've made this reader very happy. Brilliant job.

this was awsome! i loved it! keep writing, you've got a gift.

Well done! I loved how spare it was. The no-frills approach made it all the more powerful and real. How'd you manage to fill in so many gaps with so little prose? Talent, that's all there is to it. Congrats on a well-crafted piece.

Really fabulous! The way you handled being inside Marion's head was simply, I think, perfect. She doesn't get all sappy and emotional, although there are succinct visitations which border on that. She keeps things to the point, with those punches of cynicism that we've all come to expect and to adore. I can't seem to say everything I want to get out about it. I guess I'll have to re-read it; I'm sure it'll be just as much a delight every subsequent time.

Thanks for writing!

-Indus Belethil_

I saw the movie and it was great, but the whole Greaser son is a nice change... and the comb... lol.

This was a nice bit of fun rhetoric of memory from out little love of Indiana and the mother of his son.

charming fic- good solid Marion pov, especially loved the 'face all beat to hell' description of Raiders-Indy, and her "It could have been a bullwhip" reaction to the motorcycle. only concrit is occasionally you slip from present pov into past, which can be a little jarring- i.e., 'you remember how much he hated his real name and scribbled Henry Jones'- you might want scribble, and it cropped up a couple of times (the thinking-about-naming-him-Indiana was another great touch.) and setting the letter after Holy Grail just fits, too. really nice job :D

This was lovely- so much bitterness, love, anger and- squee, loved it!

Thank you for sharing.

AW!

*adds to favourites*

:D

Very interesting. Cool fic!

Aw. That was sweet.

Love the story! My favorite line is "At least it isn't a bullwhip"

This is really a nice bit of fic. Sometimes second person can be hard to pull off, but you did it; and you kept everyone in character. And of course it's nice to see Marion's story filled out a little... Thanks for writing!

that was interesting... i liked it. it had a nice take but i wish there was more...well..marion in it. more of her spunk and fire, ya know?

It's very rare to find a story that sucessfully uses second person. This one-shot tackled second person and triumphed beautifully. Well done!

I appreciate an author who can get a character like Marion right. Your characterizations were brilliant. Brava!

darth_sparrow

One word . . . AMAZING! And I usually stay away from second person narratives . . . but I like it, I like the way you slowly made her grow up, but still kept her sass; and the hope mixed with knowing it probably won't work out anyways. Great job! I hope you write more Marion fics!