 MadaMag 2008-06-21 . chapter 1A bit rough and rash, but a nice story.
Great idea to make the tango as the initialization point and the dreams to make Victoria see things clearly. Victoria's decision was, IMHO, a bit to quick/to easy for her (after all she loved Zorro for over four years). Also, you hinted Esmeralda x Ignacio, but then you left your OC alone (you haven't "finished" her story - one two sentences about would be enough).
Very good is the 'showing' of tango ie. the steps, you could build a bit more onto it.
All in all, good story if a bit too short. |