this story was super cute i really Loved reading it.

she couldn't hear charlie leave or hear the doorbell ring cuz she's deaf...

Wow... it ended so different. Hahaha, no Volturis, no triangle thing with Jacob, no Reneesme, no Victoria chasing her... so much less drama. I liked it. Thanks for the story. It was great. Congrats. Take care.

How did she hear Charlie leave and how did she hear the doorbell ring if she's supposed to be deaf?

Before I say anything, I'm not trying to critize you. Just trying to help.

In the first part of the chapter it says Bella 'heard' her father leave and then the doorbell rang. If she was deaf she wouldn't have been able to acknowledge either of those things.

Just thought I'd let you know; it doesn't really matter all that much. I'm still intrigued by where you're going with this.

wow you're really good with bitter sweet endings. I loved this story too.

Loved it! :)

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da best story...!ihope bella goes deaf...!

Luv it

I heard Charlie leave and made my way downstairs to eat.

The doorbell rang and I nearly fell out of my seat.

"Bella," I could almost hear the condescension in his voice

It's just a little confusing. If, maybe, she could feel the knock from the door or she saw Charlie leave.

i absolutly love it._

aww! no sqeul ! and i read you others tories and there great!

this is really gud

Um, I like the storyline and everything, but i'd just like to point out in this chapter that you say Bella "heard" charlie leave and the the "doorbell rang" and startled her.

Hey, so far this is a great story except I would like to point out two things

1. Only about thirty percent of the English language is actually visible on the mouth

2. If you are hearing and you suddenly become deaf, it will be harder to read lips for that person than it would be for someone who is deaf, and even reading lips for someone who has done it all their lives is hard.