This is a great start. I really enjoyed reading this, as it is very well-written. It was creepy and I could feel the tension as Juan went to feed the animals. It's terrible that he died doing his job, and for of all companies, the Biosyn corporation. I like the part where he considers that "the other genetics company" (most likely InGen) is copying Biosyn, when really, it's almost the other way around with Biosyn ripping off of InGen. I also like how you painted Juan's character as someone who has dreams, and wants to do things in his life. Usually, in the movies, and even in books, these characters that are shown briefly, who get devoured within five minutes, are rarely thought about. Even if they don't make a huge impact on the story, they're still someone and you showed this very well. I really look forward to more of your story and I hope you update soon!