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Butterfree
2009-11-25 . chapter 4
"she felt it was almost better than loving her"
You know, I've always felt that way concerning the relationship between Luffy and Nami if they ever were to become a couple. Even if they weren't lovers, Oda has clearly shown us how much they are as Nakama. To me, the trust he has with Nami as well as Zoro(though in a different way) as Nakama have always been stronger than everyone else's. Luffy and Nami would be the type to still keep that trust/friendship even after becoming lovers, which is one of the things that would make their relationship even better than just love, in my opinion.

I love how you've chosen the unusual path of telling this whole story from partially Luffy's point of view. What I've always noticed about fanfictions for any fandom is that one person from that couple is taken by fanfiction authors as being 'easier' to write about. In this case, everyone favours writting only with Nami's thoughts in mind because of how much of a paradox Luffy is.

Authors that do chance at writting at Luffy's view, they tend to express him as being completely out-of-character, and with no consideration for what he might actually do. It really is great how you managed to write on him so effectively. Even in the very few moments where he was slightly out-of-character, it was in a way in which was pretty understandable (aside from maybe the killing thing I mentioned earlier; though you kept whether Luffy killed him or not in the dark...personally I think he didn't and didn't tell Nami out of slight regret).

In contrast, the story was sort of lacking a bit on Nami's sudden development of love for Luffy in the last scene. However strange it is though, at the same time, her love for him didn't feel like it came out of nowhere in this chapter. Personally, I think one or two additional thought bubbles from Nami during the second half would've been enough and kept me from noticing the rushed-ness(if that's a word) on her part at all.

Hmm, I am a bit confused about when Usopp said that Nami was the first of 'us' that Luffy met. I guess 'us' would be referring to all of them except Zoro(since he wasn't really sitting with them)? Unless you're saying this in terms of how Luffy and Nami met in the anime.

Overall, it was a very nice and believable story. In fact, if I saw something similiar to this happening in the manga in terms of their love(not length of adventure, as we all know how amazing Oda would write for such a purpose), I'd very well believe it. ^^

Yes, long review; I apologize if it bothers you.
~ CupidKirby(TwisterKirby)
Butterfree
2009-11-25 . chapter 3
I think the “I want to kill you" quote from Luffy was really the only thing that was out-of-character for me. I mean, Arlong had done much worse to her, yet Luffy didn't completely kill him and even decided to help him in later chapters because Nami said he could. He just isn't the type to actually kill his enemies no matter what that've done, at least so far.

Really though, having only one moment in which the story felt foreign to the style of One Piece is VERY impressive.

~ CupidKirby(TwisterKirby)
Butterfree
2009-11-25 . chapter 2
“But all I had to do was distract him some beef jerky.”
That's low. Really low.

You really have the characters in the SH crew down well in your story. Pretty much all of the banter they exchanged gave off that same vibe that their crew always does. Trust me, a lot of authors fail to do this due to being distracted by whichever couple they're writting about. I'm really glad that you weren't.

~ CupidKirby(TwisterKirby)
Butterfree
2009-11-25 . chapter 1
Hmm, it's amazing how much you thought this whole "Luffy and Nami kidnapped" scenario through. You did a good job making sure that there weren't any plot holes in the whole situation, despite how difficult doing that sort of thing is.

Great start so far! Strangely, it didn't feel rushed at all.
~ CupidKirby(TwisterKirby)
anime girl4
2009-09-20 . chapter 4
aww! Too cute. It was really well written and everyone was IC too. I think I've fallen in love with your One Piece fics :)l
staggered incite
2009-08-26 . chapter 4
lovely. thanks for the read.
DRAGONFIRE563
2009-07-29 . chapter 4
WOW this was an extraordinary story!
Avelona
2009-07-24 . chapter 4
...I cried when I read this. I CRIED! Thank you for blessing us with this story!
*mumbles* ...Odd, I don't cry at funirals but THIS...
YT Neonix
2009-06-05 . chapter 4
Short and sweet. Excellent work. ^^
Lord of Murder
2009-06-02 . chapter 4
Aw such an awesome ending. It was flufftastic a really good fic.
funvince
2009-02-28 . chapter 1
It's quite rare to see intelligent villains in the One Piece world. I'm impressed with the execution of this kidnapping. This is a very interesting premise.
DragonoftheEastblue
2009-02-25 . chapter 4
i saw this on deviant art so i decided to check it out here. nice story but u should continue it.
xheartkreuzx
2009-02-19 . chapter 4
aw. this story was soo good!!
xheartkreuzx
2009-02-19 . chapter 1
loved the first chapter!
OrpheumZero
2008-11-04 . chapter 4
Hmm, I guess it's understandable that Luffy would go over the line to save someone if he felt it was just the right thing. A bit ooc, but it's worth it.

Nice ending, doesn't become too fluffy or anything distracting. And Luffy certainly does seem like a person who might not know what love is precisely.

Great story overall. I really enjoyed it. You should check out my stories sometime, I've got 3 based on OP. You might get a kick out of them.

Keep up the wonderful work!
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