I thought the Flying Dutchman became Will's ship. (Silly ending really, not yours, the movies.)
Well written, though I like the other one better for reasons that are not apparent. Maybe I like the dark stuff better.

This is beautifully written.

Loved it! I liked how you mixed all thier thoughts together without making it too confusing.

Awesomely poetic. Little snapshots of thought and feeling, and I can't help but think that the story itself is made all the more compelling because the snapshots are all we have.

Excellent!

Absolutely gorgeous. The voices are perfect.

wow. This is great - a take on the situations I've never seen before. I like it!

I have one tiny suggestion, though. You might want to add the name of each character before their section - it's a tad bit confusing. But otherwise, great!!