I thought that was quite good Ivy, I enjoyed it! I definitely think you should contine with the fanfic thing :)

I thought your story was great! I've always thought, from the Harry Potter books, that Snape was tormented.
Way to go! Hope you write some more.

I love your fan fic. I would give it a 10/10.

that was a very touching story, very creative and insightive. Good way of looking at things through another's eyes and soul. I applaud your tallents.

This story is absolute genius! Very imaginative and illuring ideas. Good dialogue and cpativating plot. Love it! :)

Please, dont listen to the people that say your writing is bad. You have an amazing knowledge for grammer and literary skills! Your stories are very entertaining and intrigueing. Don't believe what others say. They're really just jelous of your great tallents! :)

I wish you could publish these stories in book format because they are so great! People would love to buy them and you would be rich! Thank you for your fine work and dedication to the books and their fans! Rowling would be flattered by your interest in her books. :)

i want to comment that you wrote "a bit" twice in a row when you said that snape smirked at the thot of ppl rumoring about him and eve. and you shouldnt address her as eve, it should be Professor Epaulets, like the other teachers. Great story!

That was a kewt story! I loved the ron and hermione fight, very similar to Rowling's work. I had the same idea of a story, but with vital differences in it. Well..unfortunately we got professor umbridge as the next DATDA teacher, so hopefully itz a pretty lady next since most of them have been guys. Thank yu for the story!I cant find anything to critisize it on.

Good! There are a few grammatical errors, but the majority of us aren't professional writers, so don't worry about it. It was actually quite good. But I was hoping for a sex scene:)

I am SO cofused. (i got to chapter 3 by the way.) Where u got this idea i have NO clue. At all. None what so ever. Nada. Zilch. BUTS ITS FREAKIN' CATCHY AND THATS WHAT MATTERS RIGHT? Right. Right. ok. so youve like i dunno im gonna write my own fan fic or something...maybe the return of snape's evil gay brother or something... who knows... who cares. ;)

I thought the story was good! It was a very interesting outlook on Snape's past and it made him seem so sweet. I swooned.

I was gratified to read a fanfiction that rose above the usual petty self-insertion to grip the reader. Unexpected twists, unmitigated evil and the cavalry appearing over the hill in the absolute nick of time. Exactly the trademarks of J.K.'s novels. Good stuff. A word of advice- descriptiveness is important, and it is not good to focus that merely on sympathetic characters' physical aspect. The effect can be cloying. In people, describe character and personality. Try to find a little more depth. I recommend the Lord of the Rings as an example of this.
Sincerely,
Ezra J. Starsmore
Order of the Caduceus
Wyvern House
Locke School of Wizardly Arts
Vivianne, VA

Very moving! It really kept my interest! You could be a great writer someday!

I loved it!