|Reviews for No Chance for Fate|
| Mei-kun 1/9/09 . chapter 1
good story, getting more interesting with each chapter (waiting for the reaction of "the Talk").keep the great work and update soon please -
| USAVet 10/26/08 . chapter 4
Interesting. I find the story to be well written and it flows well. Very interesting use of the Senshi and the changes to everyone as a whole. Not too sure where you are going with this one but it has my interest. Keep it up when you can. Have fun with the writing too.
| enderverse 10/13/08 . chapter 4
You still have a few spelling mistakes, not counting Ranma's speech of course but still a great storyline.
| Dumbledore 10/9/08 . chapter 4
Fun story! I'm enjoying it thoroughly. Keep up the good work!
| Prustan 10/8/08 . chapter 4
Short and sweet. Good stuff. More please :D
| ranko lina Inverse 10/7/08 . chapter 4
Poor Plu doesn't even knew wht she got her self into.
| A Reviewer 10/6/08 . chapter 4
Overall, it's been a really interesting story so far, and takes a number of interesting real-world concerns into the issues and problems surrounding both casts. It's not terribly evident exactly where the story is going just yet though, although Akane's transfer does imply parts of the Ranma 1/2 plot will continue.
However, I do have a real big complaint. One I'm sure you have/will be getting plenty of. Giving Ranma a period is a lame and poor plot device. More of a crutch used to add conflict rather than what I personally would call an actual plot device or story element. Realistically speaking, I'd imagine that such an even would likely snap Ranma's psyche clear in two, causing anything from a split personality to catatonia. While I don't disagree that the curse would cause someone to be able to bear children, anything like a 'curse lock' or other similar ideas are... worn and trite, not to mention poorly conceived. Granted, this is all my own opinion, but as a reader, it is another view for you to consider.
Putting that aside for the moment, you've started with a really decent premise (/not/ starting the story with Ranma engaged to any of the Tendos) so far, but I'll wait and see how the plot forms before I set my judgment on the story for the here and now.
| RanmaChaos 10/6/08 . chapter 4
Great chapter!Please continue to UPDATE!
| robzone 10/6/08 . chapter 3
you rock. great chapter man. keep them coming.
| Gyr 10/6/08 . chapter 4
I really like this story. It's very interesting, and your plot- and character-development are almost ideal. While there are problems with grammar, especially in the later chapters, I hope that won't discourage you. You've still managed to lay out the story very well, such that I've had no trouble understanding it, and the help of a proofreader should clean up any rough parts. The interactions and emotional reactions of your characters are especially well-managed and believable, and I'm looking forward to seeing how the situation you've set up here plays out. Thanks for writing this story so far. I'll keep an eye out for future updates.
| Dumbledork 10/5/08 . chapter 4
Excellent new chapter. But please, don't make this a Ranma/Akane story. My favourite pairing is Ranma/Setsuna of course, but I don't think that's possibility in this story.
| Jerry Unipeg 10/5/08 . chapter 4
GREAT CHAPTER! (*x4) Poor Pluto, her life well be harder.
| Greydon Creed 10/5/08 . chapter 1
Been reading this story and have been enjoying it. It's good to see a realistic reaction to the Hentai Horde and Akane's break because of it, not to mention people's responding to the madness in Nerima and soon in Juuban. Hope to see more soon.
| Calamity Cordite 10/5/08 . chapter 2
Well, the concept was okay and I'd like to say it's fairly well executed...but I can't.
I'm guessing that English isn't your first language so I'll try to moderate my comments with that in mind.
I managed to get two paragraphs into chapter 2 before I couldn't deal with the awkward word choices and invented words anymore. You seem to have a particularly tough time with 'heared'; I think you meant 'heard' since 'heared' isn't a word (unless you're a hick/hayseed/hillbilly). You made this error a number of times.
Another thing that bugged me was all Ami's 'learning'. I can't say it's outright wrong, but it would have sounded better if you'd have used 'studying' instead.
I apologize if this sounds harsh. If English isn't your first language, then I applaud your effort. You've done a lot better than I could have done trying to write in a language that isn't native to me. Unfortunately I have a low tolerence for oddly strung together words.
On the plus side, you're formatting and punctuation are both a lot better than many native English authors. Outstanding job there.
Thanks for sharing. Maybe I'll give it another shot if you get an editor that can help eliminate the awkward word choices in a revision.
Good luck with it and don't get discouraged because one or two people might not like it. You have a lot of other people that do and if I didn't think you had potential I wouldn't have bothered leaving a comment at all.
| chaosmagez 10/5/08 . chapter 4
This story is good and well written. The story development is slow, but it is still good.