Interesting story so far, but you're a little too brief at times. In some parts it seems kinda like you're getting the main points written out, but not really filling in the gaps. What you have written is good, i can see that you clearly have writing skill, so try to apply it more in the stories to make everything seem more detailed and rich. Also try to make the chapters a little longer? Something is happening, and you go to read more, but you've hit the bottom of the page. Going to a different chapter every couple of minutes is breaking up the flow of the story. Hope this was helpful!
update soon, and keep up the good work!

Looks good, I can't wait to see what happens!!