Gorgeous, really beautiful. I envy you the ability to write 'second person', I've never mastered it, but you do it very well. And your Ianto is really good. I'd love to see more.

That was great, I really enjoyed it.

That was really good! I love the way you wrote it, like Ianto was explaining it to someone else, giving a set of instructions.

I also loved that last line, it was a great metaphor! It really really worked.

Good characterisation too, well done!

A very good take on Ianto's reaction, your characterisation and illustration were excellent. I'm not used to 2nd person and wasn't sure if it would work when I started reading, as I know how hard it can be to write in. But you pulled it off beautifully. I'd like to read more of your work.

Wonderful. You have to love Ianto Jones.