I have been blown away by this fic! I could not put it down, I love the Luke/ Mara storyline and can't wait to read what happens next. Will Luke have to face the clone of father? (Gasps) can't wait to read how that plays out. Please finish this trilogy and write part three.
You can't not finish something this WONDERFUL. I wish you could publish this in print, I would buy it in a nanosecond. It is way better than profic. I, too, started losing interest in them but still read them because I was starved for Luke /Mara interaction, and wanted to see Ben Skywalker's development.

cool!

Brilliant. Just brilliant. Thank you kindly.

k im gonna be honest... i still dont get what this story is about :P

but its kinda fun to see the mystery unravel :P

good thing the story keeps sucking me in, just like the dark side :P haha

Loved this one too! Your way of switching between pov was ever so clever, the lifted quotes were fun, and I loved the L/M moments and Han and the imperials teaming up. I'm guessing the senator Leia teamed up with and Luke doesn't like is some super secret traitor? Oh Leia. I thought the cloning was a tad bit unoriginal, but the feedback sensors were neat. The alliance of Karrade femfatals is wonderful! Thrawn!Han and amazing operatives Luke, Mara, R2-D2, and Mara's deadly older siblings were my favorite bits.

Thanks for writing!

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Your story was very good.

There were few things I appreciated in your story

Firstly most of your characters were not OOC and thats always nice thing. I loved your version of Daala, but then I hated Leia's slips to dark side. Without those two counted there werent any too OOC charcters (well I cant really know since I havent and I wont read other than Zahn's star wars books), but if there were other OOCs atleast they didnt disrupt me.

Secondly you had made some nice research. I really appreciate it when author makes the effort to make story as "smooth" (in lack of better word) as possible.

Thirdly story itself was quite nice. There were many small things I liked in it... Han outmaneuvering imperial fleet with smugler tactics, Mara's thoughts about artoo, Karrde's thoughts about force, Relationship of Mara and Shada, Noghris that accompanied Luke and Mara, Mara's training in Dagobah among others.

Ofcourse there were some things that I disliked too... I really didnt like idea of cloned jedi masters. Leia reminded me too much about palpatine and his rise to power, but I guess that was what you intended. Character deaths of even so minor characters than gillespee and mazzic (I always hate character deaths) and Karrde's problems with his organization I would have really liked to see smuglers alliance in action.

Thanks for good story.

Excellent.

OMG, this story is incredible! I love the interaction b/w Luke & Mara. The lightsaber fight in the horrid honeymoon suite *shudders* was fantastic. I love the suspense and Flint's involvement, and bringing Shira into the mix makes it even better.

Leia nearly going darkside was a definite surprise, but so well done. I can literally see the story you're creating and you are keeping true to the characters.

I spent most of the time intrigued or laughing. You set up a great AU of the Star Wars universe, and I cannot wait to read more of your stories.

Oh, to be a pain, Luke and Mara are not that tall at all. Does Mark Hamill look 5' 9" to you? XD

The Essential Guide to characters is 1.72m for Luke & 1.6m for Mara. In conversion, that makes Luke around 5'6"/5'7" (thou Mark is 5'6"?)and Mara around 5'3"/5'4". Han is, according to my version of metric/english systems and the guide, about 5'10"/5'11" (though we all know Harrison Ford is taller than that). Random information where you probably want to smack me, but hey, it's 5am and I should be sleeping, not reviewing!

Great job! :)

Awesome fanfic so far-I agree, I didn't care all that much for the JA trilogy; I'd much rather have this be canon. Kudos on a job very well done. That being said, I do have one question: If the clones Luke and Mara have been fighting are clones of Jedi Masters-and, according to Luke, exactly like the Joruus C'boath clone from T-why don' they use the Force more?

When Luke tangled with them on Genesia, he used a Force push at least two or three times, yet it wasn't until him and Mara fought another group in that Sith Temple that one of the clones thought to do the same. Joruus C'boath, on the other hand, not only used the force in various ways on a regular basis, he nearly overwhelmed the combined efforts and powers of Luke, Mara and Leia. Just something I found odd.

I loved the story, but it seems to me that you've missed the most logical way for Lumiya to survive Kinooine.

*Clearly* that was actually a clone of Lumiya which had received the same cybernatic replacements she'd had, she sent it to die on Kinooine so that she could fool the Empire and the Rebellion both into thinking she was dead. After that she could begin building up her own network, so she could take power herself someday ...

Sorry, Rigel Kent wasn't a gripe directed at you. Just putting a view. In most all storylines, including official books that when faced by a squad of stormtroopers or a crimelord's gang members a Jedi dosn't spend the first 10-20 minites telling them to come now, be good. Just when facing a Dark Jedi. The Dark Side seems to be treated as though someone caught a cold. Now, now you will be better soon.

Anyway, onward to the start of Shattered Dreams when it begins. Lumiya revealed as Main Bad. A Anakin clone, very interesting. How will Luke handle that?. And by this teaser trailer plenty of trials and tribulations for all our hero's coming up.

Looking forward for it.

So again with the teaser.

With Tyranny Beborn I mentally checked off each teaser occurance..I BELIEVE I got them all..but didn't double check...

Ok;

I can buy Mara not talking about the cave..

BUT if Luke has determined she is worthy of 's NOT going to keep it a secret..She's his first "graduated" student..He would/should find a way to mark the occassion..NOT slip a note under the door..Oh. by the way your a Knight...

Can't wait for book 2!

Wow, I can't say how excited and motivated i am to read more of The Unseen War! Thus far, I've loved every twist and turn that the stories is taking with characters, though i'm a bit worried about Leia... Anyway, i most appreciate how quick you're updating and with the quality they have. I'm blow away! Really pumped for the next update! Please, please, keep up with this very addictive story!

Aww... is my name so long that you have to refer to me as PK88? Actually I kind of like it and feel free to continue using it.

I'm glad Luke and Mara will be a couple in the next installment, you hinted at it enough in your first two stories. The teaser looks great, I can actually picture most of the parts, though instead of posting a teaser I would have prefered the first chapter of Shattered Dreams. Just get it out quickly and I won't have any issues though.

I wish I could have seen that. The imaging center of my brain is retarded, at least by writers' standards. But it's a good teaser...

I don't think Ahsoka should have been created, either, especially since she would have had to die before ROTS, since you can't train an apprentice in less than three years.

And I wouldn't have given Anakin a padawan unless he/she/it is much smarter and stronger (personality-wise) than he is.

Do the clones of the Jedi have any of the Jedi's personality in them? I assume Anakin's clone would be wildly powerful, since that has to be genetic, but it doesn't seem like they think for themselves.

I guess I'll find out.