I was very excited to see another chapter of this; I'm still loving your pre-canon timeline and how gorgeously fleshed out and intricate you're making the backgrounds of all our favorite characters. I'm awfully impressed by how canon feeling it all is. :) I did think this chapter, with its introspective focus, did get a little repetitive at points regarding Arthur's thoughts on soldiering and Dorothy, making the same point with different words, but it was still very poignant. Looking forward to more soon!

Loved the substantial chapter encompassing his view of his life and that of his family. Dermail shines as the thorn bush in his garden, just the nature of the man marking him though he did not take up the entire chapter to do so. A soldier through and through but one who thinks and feels and loves too. Liked it.

Doing constructive criticism as I go! ^_^ Told ya i'd read it! The note worked. XD I'm such a spazz. I promise it's constructive if I get annoying tell me to shut up!

1 - . Edward didn’t have to wonder much at it.
Just the wording of it the last part wonder much at it. A bit confusing

2 - stepped from the side of the limo
Again, wording. Would he step out from inside the limo?

3 - Jw why you put king in lower case rather than King

4 - Though his family had been the villains in one story, they were not bad people and in this kingdom of peace,

Just feeling that the commas might be unnecessary.

5 - the man was sometimes invited he would often give the prince his dessert as he always said he had no appetite for sweets,

The things surrounding it and all just seems like a run-on. Reads ok though.

6 - Just a note. I don't mind a long chapter as much as the next person but this is extremely long. You could easily split these up into multiple chapters. ^_^ Majority of people have short attention spans. XD

7 - I LOVE how descriptive you are! It's great and it paints a picture for the reader even though I've never seen it!

8 - My main criticism is simply length. Just that people only want to read so much at once. That's probably why you have so few reviews for such wonderful work! People will read more in smaller doses than the same amount in larger ones.

But seriously, great writing Michigan. You're awesome.

Again I mean to be constructive by what I've said. ^_^

More interesting still. I particularly like the young Treize.

Well I'm happy to say I think chapters 2 and 3 continued to live up to the standard set by chapter 1. It's great how you're able to call up this highly stylized prose so naturally, and it works so, so well for the world you're building. I will just nitpick the spelling and grammar, however, because it is so unfortunate to have the flow of the story interrupted by such little details. Watch your comma placements and words that are easily confused with other words (lull/loll, there/their...). Only other thing...I was a little surprised to hear of an aristocrat dying of tuberculosis -- for all the old-fashioned airs people in the AC timeline put on the technology of the time is obviously still superb and L2, a colony, is (to my knowledge) the only place we hear about having any health problems. Possibly you might want to pick a different disease? One we've had more trouble eradicating, maybe? Maybe even (hah) some new strain of influenza, which would still give you a certain period feel. Well anyway, I'm continuing to enjoy the fic and I look forward to reading more soon!

Wow! I'm loving this so far - it has the same feel as one of those adaptations of a classic war novel you'd see on Masterpiece Theatre or something, lol; very expansive and mannered. A few minor spelling/grammar issues - mostly to do with confusion over words that sound the same but are spelled differently and mean different things (gorilla/guerilla, gate/gait, etc). Otherwise, cool stuff; I look forward to more!

A very interesting beginning. I'll be following with interest and I do hope you keep up the good work.

I love how well-developed your OCs are. That's a rare thing and with the sheer level of back story you're tackling here -- a very difficult task. I just remembered another reason why Treize would not have known Zechs prior to the fall of Sanc: their families were ideologically opposed; Treize is Dermail's nephew and related to the warmongering Catalonias. I doubt his family, who secretly pulls the strings behind the Alliance, would ever consent to him visiting pacifist Sanc which is a thorn in their side.

The history you're building here is astounding in its scope with all the myriad Khushrenada, Catalonia, Peacecraft relatives. The execution scene was heartbreaking. I love the references to real places you've littered here and there. I'm very much enjoying this story.

Fascinating! A thoroughly realistic glimpse at the pre-series world. I noticed one major typo: "gorilla attacks" - I think you meant "guerrilla." Also, I'm fairly certain that Treize and Zechs didn't meet before the fall of the Sanc Kingdom. Treize doesn't know who Relena Darlian is in the series until Noin tells him or that he even had any living relatives and when Dorothy comments on them having played as children, she means when Treize's family adopts Milliardo after the fall of Sanc and they were all together.

But that doesn't even matter because this story is so unique in how it depicts life pre-series, especially with Reginald's reasoning for resisting the Alliance strengthened by Heero Yuy's assassination. I do have to wonder why the Duke Icely doesn't seem to have a bodyguard? Excellent job overall!

Great start. Please continue!

Good introduction. Intriguing. Continue.