I love texts that find unique ways and combine words in a different way to describe something and conveys an image or an emotion that is spot on. This does just that!

Cooll...

You continue to amaze and surprise. Loved it!

Doc

Evocative and touching. The apology is very powerful. I think you have a talent here...don't write off coming back to poetry - please!

beautiful and wow...haunting actually...

fab

I really liked this well done.

Poetry is beautiful, but I have to confess that I find it complicated, that´s why I don´t use to read it.

I love what you wrote, though. I find it very powerful and, as always, you managed brilliantly to make me feel the emotions with your beautiful words.

Thanks a lot for sharing! :-)

That was very good.

I'm not a huge fan of peotry, nor do I profess to know anything about it or be an educated critic. That said, I really enjoyed it!

Leah

Very deep and intense! I enjoyed it!

:D Amazing! The language is beautiful, and Iove the first two lines.

Scarlet slik rivers slip
Throught trembling fingers

Well done, please write more!

It may be from a different sandbox, but it is still pure Lerdo!

Again, so much said, with so little.

**Eyes shaded like dirt and old blood
...definately a Brennan-like thought

**A car coughs;
...always the small details

I haven't mentioned this in a while, but I am glad that creative pit you obviously still have in your backyard, is bottomless. :-):-):-)

good poetry...


HawkAngel

Hi there,
This is just so good and so beautful...from a different sandbox but just the same...
Bones having a dream about trying to stem the flow of Seeley's blood with her fingers and how cold he is getting...the eyes looking back at her are not the choclate brown ones she is used to but those eyes threatened by death and is that an attempt by her to say some semblance of a prayer before she wakes up...
Loved this.
Ger

Another beautiful piece of writing - I love your style! The images are so clear, and yet not obvious. "Eyes shaded like dirt and old blood" - Yup, I can imagine that color, and I can imagine Brennan describing a brown that way. Thank you!

WOW! That's fantastic!

Pirate.