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Mynerva24 2008-07-23 ch 1, anon.	abuseWOW! You made me think that the woman is Stella, till the last minute! I believe the other reviews said almost the same... You wrote this story elegantly, choosing decade instead of years, wisdom of the elderly woman wrapped up in the enthusiasm of the youth, and exquisite description of the surroundings. Great job! (^__^)
Shining Zephyr 2008-06-06 ch 1,	abuseYou know, I really did enjoy this. It's truly a wonderful piece, lily. I've never felt so at peace with reading a fic like this, and right now, I truly feel at peace with myself! You've managed to put me into a calm sort of thing with angst, and... well, I just really enjoy this fic. You did a marvelous job with it, LIly. Awesome and gorgeous work. ~Shiny-sama
SallyJetson 2008-06-01 ch 1,	abuseThat was just breathtakingingly beautiful! The cadence of this piece gives it such an ethereal feel and your characterizations and the actions of the woman in her seventh decade were breathtakingly poetic and vividly engaging like this one: 'On an impulse, with the confidence of one who had never feared others’ judgement, she walked over, and stood beside him; never intrusive, but her presence as always unconsciously demanding notice.' And the conversation so sparse but yet full of meaning like this passage: “I never tire of this view.” He smiled without moving his face away, “Neither do I.” “Pardon me for saying so, don’t take this as the confession of a stalker either, but I’ve noticed you a few times here before.” “You don’t strike me as a stalker.” This piece is about passing life lessons learned on to others so they may reap the benefits before it's too late but in the end it is the twist that really hit me in the heart: “You gave me advice, and I owe you a name.” He said, holding out his hand, dark hair smoothed by the breeze. “Mac Taylor.” I so thought I had this figured out but your twist proved me wrong and gratefully so. Brilliant!!
Blue Shadowdancer 2008-05-31 ch 1,	abuseThis was really, really beautiful. I was sure that the woman was Stella to start with, I liked how you described her in such a way that she did match up with Stella's character. I loved the gentle flow of the words, there were such lovely images in there, 'a day of easeful beauty with a breeze like silk', 'A place of passing and times passed', 'rippled steel of the river', 'afternoon spilled shadows that wavered on the water'. I could quote a lot more. I also liked the continuation of the theme of ships into 'grand old dames she knew who had sailed on past their first century and into their second; galleons undaunted by the horizon'. I liked the storyline running through, the parallels between their two lives, and the way she persuaded Mac at last to take a chance with Stella. 'He agreed with me. Something he usually did', definitely a parallel there! Also loved the sadness of the fact that 'there could never have been enough years' for them both to be together. You describe Mac's eyes a lot, 'the turning colours of the ocean, altering under the suns and winds, light and dark in a single glance', and 'eyes hid amongst a nebula', lovely way of saying that. I also like the reference to stars, and of course that link to Stella again. Beautiful story, again.
ImaSupernaturalCSI 2008-05-31 ch 1,	abuseThat was really pretty. I'm at a loss for words, other than that. A beautiful piece.
marialisa 2008-05-31 ch 1,	abuseWhat a wonderful result from a walk around a Cornish town! I love how you used an OC for the stories POV and I particularly love how you opted for someone older, "still beautiful in her seventh decade". By using 'decade' rather than '60's' you maintain her mystique and it lends elegence to the reveal of her age (an important part of the storyline but which can sometimes interupt a storyline) You manage to give us the detail in a way that adds to our picture of this mysterious lady. I also loved this, "Sometimes it caught her by surprise that she had reached such an age, and yet felt no different to when she was in her third decade". It is so true! It also shows us that she is still young at heart and so when she talks to Mac it is with the wisdom of age and the hope of (relative) youth. Her conversation with Mac was lovely - the sort of conversation that sometimes it is easier to have with a stranger than with someone close to us. Her wisdom was wonderful, "There could never have been enough years, even if we’d both lived to be a hundred. We had time together, and that was what we had to be content with" This rings so true on so many levels. Losing someone we love can make us bitter about lost time but her acceptance and gratitude for the time she did have is the only way that you can move on with your life and not end up stuck in a limbo - words that apply to Mac and his grief over Claire. Loved how she gave Mac a gentle telling off, "Who says you have to lose that? You gain more than you lose, take it from someone who knows" and the words obviously strike home, "He smiled, and his face lost some of the lines that pressed into his skin" - a wonderful image to show us how the conversation is helping him make a decision. The ending was perfect - just perfect. “You gave me advice, and I owe you a name.” Like I said - perfect.
greyslostwho 2008-05-31 ch 1,	abuseOh, brilliant. You had me thinking the woman was Stella until the last second. That was really well written. Loved it. Thanks.
Missy-AhKi 2008-05-30 ch 1,	abuseI love this, subtle, yet very sweet. SWET!
iluvcsi4ever 2008-05-30 ch 1,	abuseI love this. I am going to spend a while reviewing this. If I leave for too long they are going to put Kelly with Mac in this storytime thing. Oh do save me! My friend has even come up with a ship name. Do not get me started. lol. This was so great! At first I was confused at who the man was. I thought it was either Mac or like his son maybe. I loved the description of his eyes like the waves turning in the ocean with the sun shining. It does describe Mac's eyes. I bet we will have many conversations on what color his eyes actually are. lol. I love the descriptions of the ships. I keep thinking like ships like SMacked and DL. lol. I love how Mac and Stella finally realized their feelings for each other as they need to do. The chemistry is there. I wish they would just get together already! Now, I'm ranting. Great one shot! Hope you had a great day! This review isn't very long. I'm sorry. It's almost midnight here. I ought to get to bed, but it's summer. lol. :D
findinggonzo 2008-05-30 ch 1,	abuseOh, this was absolutely beautiful! I'm having trouble finding the right words to describe it. It was so sweet and gentle, even though it had sad moments in it. And you had such beautiful descriptions in there. And you had me for a moment, thinking that the older lady was Stella. Clever way to put it, with the parallels between her life and Mac and Stella's. Great one-shot, loved it. Really nice, thankyou :)
shawdoo 2008-05-30 ch 1,	abuseSuperb! The parallel between the older woman's life and the path Mac's life could take was amazingly written. Wonderful one-shot.
chrysalis escapist 2008-05-30 ch 1,	abuseOh wow, how very very clever!! You almost had me there, almost (the ma'am and sir puzzled me!). I believe that it could actually happen, that 'she' remembers 'him' and it seems like, well, them..., you really packed so many of Stella's characteristics into her, though without it feeling wrong for a second. (Hope that makes sense!) I just loved the pace of this and the calm descriptions, very beautiful! 'Watching, but waiting for no earthly ships.' I had a bit of a feeling there she was waiting for relationSHIPS. 'the faces that accompanied her were different now' was beautiful, with the implication of change in the faces themselves (i.e. age) but also new faces. Also loved 'But it was easier to smile than it had been and memories could rise in her heart now without wrapping themselves so tightly around it she could not feel its beat.' Perfectly sums up the stages of grief. Also loved this: 'the turning colours of the ocean, altering under the suns and winds, light and dark in a single glance' and this part: '"You've loved?" - The river ebbed and swelled below them.' reflecting her emotions. And of course 'and he agreed with me. Something he usually did.' :) Also 'Man, never thought I'd catch myself saying THAT!' had me chuckle too! 'she heard him speak a name that was written in the stars', ah! Sigh! I want this to happen!! It's so beautiful...
foxdvd 2008-05-30 ch 1,	abusesigh Beautiful. The kind of beautiful that almost make syou wish you were in love... and remember the times past when you were.
sarramaks 2008-05-30 ch 1,	abuseI adored this. It's probably one of the best one shots I've read on this site for an age. I still wonder if it's a ghost of Stella come back to pass on advice... Maybe? There were lots of good descriptions I could pick out; I loved the analogy with the ships and the descriptions of the sea, it felt very calming and soothing. I may well use this for analysis next time I'm teaching descriptive writing if I may (you'll get used to begging emails for specific written pieces!).

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