omg, that is so sad! Sheesh, I have a lump in my throat. I really liked the idea of the story and the first person perspective. So original. It actually makes me kinda annoyed with Revan, stealing Carthy-Warthy away like that. And the way they didn't quite explain what was happening to poor little Dustil at any point goes a long way towards explaining all his resentment and tension with his father. So sad. I do think it could have benefited from some sort of confrontation or change, though. As it was, it felt like a piece of a larger story, rather than a stand alone piece. Does that make sense? Over all it was VERY atmospheric - I felt like I could really sense the moody lighting and the imposing weather. I can't wait to work with you on the third collab over on CC!

This was an absolutely beautiful piece of work! Very bittersweet, but who doesn't love a big of angst every now and then? It was wonderfully written and impactful. I enjoyed your portrayal of Morgana's character and the emotions that she was experiencing as Carth prepared to leave for war. I think the beauty of this piece is that the entire situation mirrors a lot of people's lives in the real world, and I love that you've touched on the subject through these characters. I'm sute a lot of people can relate. It felt very real, and I truly sympathized with Morgana as Carth left. I especially loved the scene at the end, where she crashed into Carth's arms and kissed him passionately... it was so beautiful!

There were a couple of minor grammatical errors, but they didn't take away from the piece at all. Overall, it was a wonderful piece of writing! Keep it up! :-D

Aww! So sweet and so sad! A few mistakes in wording ("Although, though I loved him,"), but overall very good- congrats!

I don't think you need worry about the ending to much. It was a good last few paragraphs and made it end strong! It's a depressing story :( haha then again life is just depressing! But I like it..your phrases are getting more and more discriptive and I like it :) I think you've created your own personal writing style, and for that I applaud you!