Reviews for A storm one night

Reviews For: A storm one night

Little-Leaf-Tatum 2008-06-08 ch 1,	abuseAfter your lovely reviews for my fic, i just HAD to check your out and I really loved it! You do such beautiful description which carries the story along so well (the story was great too). "silence falls with the rain" was perfect :)
Blue Shadowdancer 2008-06-02 ch 1,	abuseI loved this, frightening with the images of the water coming closer and closer to her down the steps, and then the lightning. I could pick out so many of the images, but some of my favourite are 'Uncut the rain wriggles down from the clouds, strings meeting the ground, piling up puddles', 'tears running down the faces of buildings, mourning the loss of their inhabitants', 'unraveling clouds', 'Dusk lying in corners, smoothing surfaces'. I also really liked the way you cut between Mac and Stella, and Mac's gradually forming worry about where she is. Loved the line 'He ponders making a call, but what good would it do, it’s not like he could text someone an umbrella'. And their argument compared to a storm between them, both of them now regretting it, it was a very good background for the whole story. And, of course, I'm glad that Sid was able to know where she was. I was very worried about her too! Lovely ending as well, 'A smile begins to brighten her face. She passes it on to him with a kiss. He returns it immediately, it reaches her eyes'. I hope the rain's stopped for you now!
Mindless Image 2008-06-01 ch 1,	abuseThat was totally amazing. So beautifully written! Well done!
marialisa 2008-06-01 ch 1,	abuseWe've had a week like that too (and with the children off for half term - what a joy its been) so I hope you dry out soon. I loved the structure you used; the back and flow of the short scenes immitating the back and flow of an argument and, as we know, one they both regret. Your imagery is always strong and you didn't disapoint in this story with some truly beautiful lines, such as "thunder tries to tear the clouds apart, leaves only traces of darker cracks as it rolls away through the earth" Loved the ending too, "She passes it on to him with a kiss. He returns it immediately, it reaches her eyes." - beautiful. Well done.
fruitbat00 2008-05-31 ch 1,	abuseWOW Excellent and so atmospheric. Really great work, I could just feel the cold and the rain, and the tension between the storm and the characters it was wonderfully handled. Really excellent stuff.
lily moonlight 2008-05-31 ch 1,	abuseOh dear, poor you! Hope you get a hold of some sealant soon, it certainly brings out a melancholy story, but I'm glad we had a happy ending, and a very sweet one too. Rain seems to be going around at the moment, I'm glad I've enjoyed a day of sunshine ;) I liked the visual images in this very much, really captured the strangeness and uncertainty of everything. The story of an argument that was unnecessary was very poignant, and of course, something we know they do! The structure works well too of course in building up the tension, and the flow back and forth too of the narrative. Loved the image of, 'waterfalls tipping down the steps, ever obedient to gravity.' and 'Threads extricated from the clouds.' Always nice to see Sid in a story too, he's a good choice of an understanding character. Nice contrast between the cold of the outside, and the 'heat' of arguments. I think my favourite line was, 'What is the colour of time?' That made me stop and think. Nicely strange and mysterious story!

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