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| rekahneko 2008-08-08 ch 1,  | abuseOh! I like this one. The voice is so very much a young Sirius and the words you chose just hang together so well. (-: |
| Psycho Hippy 2008-06-13 ch 1, | abuseThat was perfectly lovely. I adore it :D |
| Sivaroobini Lupin-Black 2008-06-02 ch 1, | abuseWhoosh. I am simply blown away. I have fallen in love with this. This story is poetry in motion! Your descriptions are so beautiful; I can practically see what's happening in front of my eyes. And you have captured all of them beautifully. I love how Sirius' thoughts occasionally puncture the flow (but in a poetic way, hee) with some humour. You have combined humour, wit, lovely descriptions, a wonderful premise, spot-on characterisation and beautifully romantic (and yet not cliched) prose to create this absolutely stunning work. I love these two characters so much, and you have really done them justice here. Another piece, about Sirius' slow spinning gravitation towards Remus (I typed that from memory! XD) would be well-received. ~ Sivaroobini |
| Sawlt to Your Suger 2008-06-01 ch 1, | abusethank you lotus, that made me feel so much better. it was very cute! it sounds like you talking if you think about it. like when youre not freaking out, but when youre talking and going on tangents. tehe. funny, i always thought you'd channel remus, not sirius. anyway, i thought it darling although maybe pick a diff saying than "half-lidded" ? it makes me think of M-rates. lolzz :D anyhizzle, loved it. loved the "lupin" bit. and the whoosh. its all in the SOUND EFFECTS. grawwr. and im about to write a fic and my under-constructionlj is almost complete. love you dearly. |
| Wuff 2008-06-01 ch 1, | abuseVery good! Especially considering that you described not Remus' eyes (which look like "molten gold") or his "honey-brown, soft" hair or his "pale, angelic" face etc. No, fortunately you didn't go with the clichés but described his actions and how they are special - poetic - to Sirius just because he's in love with Remus. Good job! Keep writing! |
| Kate 2008-05-31 ch 1, anon. | abuseoh. That was lovely. Really, very lovely. |