I like this, it is pretty good, u should update soom. KEEP WRITING! :3)

Hmm... It's been awhile since I read this, but of what I do remember, it was GREAT! You must update soon.

VisserZer0 out

the story is not so bad... put more chapters

Great first chapter I could have sworn I already reviewed this, but I guess it didn't show up. Well, I like what you have so far)

Is that it? I thought you would continued with this story. I think it would have been better if you had elaborated more.
I also think you should have let the Visser get away with the machine. It would have been a lot more suspenseful!

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