I adore how fully you can flesh out a character with a few simple strokes and quirky metaphors. I'm envious! You have such a gift. Your depiction of Marlene living for all she's worth was wonderful and a reminder that no one can count on tomorrow.

This is a very interesting and very original take on Marlene. Great characterization.

your Marlene's maybe totally different mine, but she's even more lovable. she's so lovely and broken and i adore the way you've characterized her.
this whole fic is amazing. what really got to me"Marlene never really expects much. (It's the only way not to be disappointed.) She thinks it's funny how much is expected about her, especially when it comes to disappointing." oh. wow. breaks my heart.

Really enjoyed this. Especially this part, "Marlene shoves unhappiness under the rug. She trips on it sometimes, but it hasn't kept her down yet. "

This, I think, is crazy beautiful. Your Marlene is so brilliant and almost exactly how I've always imagined her.

I have to say, I lovelovelove your Sirius (and the Gideon sidenote is soso lovely too).

You're brilliant.

You really flesh out a characters (Marlene, Gideon) that are just names in the books. I love all the parentheses.

I love it, especially the Gideon Fabian thing, as well as the paragraph about Sirius saving her life, or in this case, not. Especially because the Prewett twins die, and so does she. Makes you wonder, a little.

x Smaginn.

This was really interesting. I always loved the first OOTP, especially those characters it seems no one cares about like Marlene, Dorcas Meadowes and Benjy Fenwick (Poor guy doesn't seem to have a single fic about him), so it was fun to get into Marlene's head and learn about her

I loved it! Especially the line about Marlene brushing thoughts out of her hair, it shows just how breezy she wishes she was... LOVE!

I hope you right more stories soon, I just discovered you and I'm loving it all!

I like your view of Marlene, it's very interesting and a greatly enjoyable oneshot.

fantastic. I love the way you write Marlene.

short and sweet...i love the way you bring out her personality! she could be a real person...it doesn't seem as if she's just another character! love it!

This is good! I've never read Mckinnon before, but this is good. I like the way you've done it.

WONDERFUL.