Oh my god, what kind of story is this? It was written well and all, but what was with Ron? He is way to OOC. Why'd you make him so mean?

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omg please keep on going i love it please!

i hate ron... poor hermione

this is really kool! please continue!

Is she dreaming. Ron is a total prick!

The entire letter was completely ridiculous, "The house is completely ruined, and your parents have been killed in a truly horrific way.
You've got to be kidding. W

hy would the Order take a picture of her demolished home and slaughtered parents to remind her? Think for a moment. Most of the members of the Order are familiar and friendly with Hermione, I doubt that they would be that careless or thoughtless toward her. Lupin would surely tell her personally instead of sending her a letter, he is the head of the group since Dumbledore died.

Ron's so out of character, I don't know where to even begin. You should have chosen another incident to trigger Ron's leaving Hermione. The death of her family wouldn't suddenly make him vicious toward her. Harry and Ginny wouldn't allow him to say those things either, both of them have terrible tempers, they would most likely attack him.

Ron knows too much about the Order and the plans to get rid of Voldemort, he wouldn't be able to walk around knowing all that he does. Once he drops Harry's cause he would probably be sworn to secrecy or obliviated. He would be a prime target for Death Eaters to gain information, The Order wouldn't simply let him walk off. Ron disinheriting his family? Please.

The last lines were melodramatic and senseless, I swear you used "the love of her life" at least fives times in this "story.
Chop this stupid fic, for the love of Harry Potter fans.