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| chrisfardell 2008-10-05 ch 2, | abuseThis is really good |
| rmiller92 2008-06-07 ch 2, | abuseIntersting. But a little fast. Maybe you should add some more detail. Like how Susan defeated some of the men. Was she nervous? How did she feel when she was waiting for the match to start. How did her siblings react? Otherwise, the story is quite interesting. |