I LOVED IT GRATE

And this is what should have happened in the musical/movie... *trys not to rant about Christine's bad choice* Brava non the less!

That was really sweet. I think a little more emotion and maybe some internal dialogue could've made it a bit deeper, but all the same, I loved it. I wish the real story had ended this way. I just want to murder Christine every time she rows away with Raoul, having the gall to sing that blasted "All I ask Of You" song while leaving Erik to fend for himself. Argh, I'm getting worked up again. Anyway, love the story!

Sorry, but I agree with MadHatter, the dialogue was not lovely. It was fluffy, fairytale, cinderella stuff. And phantom of the opera is not a fairy tale.

I think that was fair. I personally don't think Erik would give up his ideas quite that easily nor would Raoul. they're MEN for pete's sake! I always thought they were very... stubborn with their rivalary. Next time you could make them like they are... as stubborn as any other men.

Lovely

...um...well this is just how I feel but...this was not very good. The dialoque is wa-a-a-a-a-a-ay too fluffy to seem real, but I can understand if this is off the 2004 movie. However even if it was off the movie it still doesn't make sense. It does not just take a single moment to forget about Erik's dangerous obsession(which he was ready to kill over, that's not love) and the fact that he is extremely posessive (which he would probably become worst after marriage) and even though society contibuted to his madness, the fact is Erik has to take some of the blame too. He made the choices that shaped his life (his face excluded). Futhermore Christine wouldn't just throw away everything to die with the phantom (as sad as that sounds) but we fans must understand she was written to be like an actual person (which does not make her cruel). If readers would look at it from a realistic point of view they would have seen her choice was completely understandable (and most likely we all probably would have made the same choice too). Christine had a life outside of the phantom, she had hopes and dreams like any other well written character, Christine wanted to make her own choices in life, live as she wanted (actually breathe), there was no air with the phantom. It is sad Erik had no one in life and that he would never be able to go above ground and have the options Christine has but that doesn't mean Christine has to be punished for that, or make up for society. (That doesn't mean Erik should die alone and be forgotten because that's horrible). But Christine was not perfect, and its hard to forget about everything you love, dreamed of, or wanted. Also Erik never truly loved Christine untill the moment he let her go, and when she finally left and Erik allowed her freedom I think that is when he truly became a strong character, and a man. (Before he was the selfish, cruel, and bitter puddle he allowed society to make him).

However that does not mean Christine and Erik couldn't have been together. I am very sure they could have made a great couple (which is why I love E/C fanfiction or I wouldn't have read this story) but their love would have had to take more time, not because of Erik's face, but because after tricking some one into thinking your an angel and then kidnapping them its kinda hard to establish some trust at that point. So that is why I don't think your plot made much sense but if it pleases atleast one person here then you did you job as a writer, however can you honestly say you did justice to this story??

Aw that was sweet. do they die then? as this is labelled tragedy.