what is this book called?

This was yet another great story! Can't wait 'til it's finished...I was looking at your other stories and, horror of horrors, I. SAW. THE. WORDS. MOVIE. AND. VERSE. NEXT. TO. EACH. OTHER! I'm appalled.

Hmm

Really good so far. Shudder How could you kill your own brother?

Imagine Peter trying to kill Ed or vice-versa. You can't, can you?

Evil Miraz.

Thanks for humanising Miraz (is that even a word?)

You've done this really well so PLEASE carry on with it. I think this is one of my favourite stories so far.

I like how you've followed the books rather than the film on appearances - I was a bit miffed to find that Caspian had been made Spanish (?)

I'm adding this to my story alerts - so I'll be expecting another chapter soon?

Yes! A book fic! Pruniprismia has red hair! "You" are a blonde! And "you" have a nurse! This is a great fic,I like the darker side. Adding that Mia hated Elenor was perfect,it sets the stage for her hatred of "you". Just right!

I think the romance between Miraz and "Mia" is interesting. People with as many personal issues as Miraz usually use love as a way of trying to escape themselves. Sometimes it's subconsciously done.

So, Miraz feels no remorse for killing his brother...today he's be called a sociopath...

*gasps* Your *ahem* uncle was a devious man! How did you and your *ahem* mother escape from his cruel clutches?

I cannot wait for the next part. You did this excellently! Good job!

Dearborn

Hmm... better than the first chapter! : ) Of course very well written! : )

In Aslan's Name,

Queen Susan the Gentle, Cair Paravel, Narnia

I love it! Well done, this is excellent, I esp love how Miraz calls his wife, Mia. That's cool.

Can't wait for more!

redrose7856

MURDER! OMH MURDER!

Miraz was hot in the movie.

Nicely writ. I enjoyed!

I didn't know Caspian had a dad! I mean, he had to like, have a dad and all but he wasn't alive in the books, so is this before prince Casipan? Why didn't Miraz like his brother? Was he mean? I would never kill my brother, even if I wanted to be king. PErsonally, I don't see any reason to sit on a big throne all day. Unless there's a TV in front of it and you get popcorn but honestly I would never like hurt anyone. This isn't a nice story

The story was a bit hurried, and the peasant rebellion was really short. A bit more detail in the narrative would make it more interesting, instead of just the bare facts. In other words, more paragraphs and less dialogue. Other than that, it was alright.

that was horrifying and so eloquent! I'm going to read it agian, that was absolutely magnificent! A couple glitches, though. First you said that Caspian was tall and fair, unlike Miraz who ws dark and shorter, somewhere, then you said that Caspian was dark and that his child was fair "Just like his fater', I lied'. you aid later, so you kinda messed that up. I liked it when he called Prunaprismia 'Mia', that was really nice. I LOVED how you got inside his head, his thoughts, his actions. Great use of language and vocabulary! Excellent!

Wow! Your story is great! You really should continue it.

Wow! Sad that Miraz killed his brother and one of his best friends.

Um...I think there were a couple inconsistent things. Were Caspians eyes brown or sky blue, and was Caspian the Tenth one or two weeks old?

Good descriptions of stuff. Lady Prunaprismia's deathly pale skin must greatly contrast with her flaming red hair! ;)