This story was sexy. So much so, in fact, that if it were a girl walking down the street, I'd use my best pickup lines to get her to run away with me. I'd buy all kinds of sensual massage oils and exotic fruits and edible clothing. And then I'd probably rub her uncomfortably until she told me to stop.
Seriously, though, I really enjoyed reading this story, and look forward to the sucession. :3
>_> But I wanna see more Sena-Suzu loves. *is lame like that*

HI
I just loved your new story is so ** good. You must continue! I will always be chearing for you lol

That was really good! I loved how Sena is a mix of Sena and Suzuna, while the Hiruma siblings are the embodiments of their father's wickedness. Nice to see Monta II, as well as Yukimitsu. All in all, a fun way to end the story.

Well that made absolutely no sense whatsoever with the previous chapter...oh well the ending was awesome.

Gotta love those kids.

Sorry, but that last chapter did absolutely nothing but confuse me. What the hell was up with Sena and Seiran? I assume that this will be covered in your new story, but it bothered me because everything seemed to come out of the blue, with little to nothing from earlier that supported it. An demonic Sena who drinks blood from a half-cat? I'm sorry, but you can count me out...

Your ending is a total random, what the hell.

What... what...! What!!
This chapter threw me off, true to your little intro at the top, so I guess I shouldn't be too surprised. My guess is that they're really referring to an online game, or something, but then I saw how Seiran acted in the second half of the story... huh.
Regardless of the outcome of the story, I'm looking forward to the newer installations!

:) nice making hiruma the godfather :D and what did you mean by Kobayakawa Shou Youichi? is seiran senas half sister or something because everyone is asking and for some reason i got an idea that after you told how seiran was found it could have been that senas mother and father abandoned her or something like that

YOU ARE AWESOME I LOVE YOUR STORY, I want to know if you are planning to put a girl (Sena/Suzuna) in the story or maybe twins(Mamori/Yooichi)
I hope you keep the good work and write a lot ^-^

Okay, makes sense for Hiruma to be the godfather along with mamori -hirumamo so sweet-

okay I really am liking your story but, Seiran becoming a bit Mary-sueish, but I still love her

I mean not even Sena can knock down Dorburoku, so that doesn't make sense, also please dont put Seiran in the games, we've got too many female football players as it is.

also Sena's becoming a bit too perfect too, Musashi and Mamori can understand Hiruma, I'm not sure about Kurita, makes sense for Seiran she is his sister, but it just doesn't suit Sena's personality to understand Hiruma, sorry,

update soon I can wait to see how this turns out

Ahahaha I knew it I kew than the godfather will Hiruma ^^ great story I encourage you to continue

AW! loved it as usual!! so kawi! XD hiruma babysiting?? pure genius. that bebe is perfect in the story. and seiran is amazing!! love ya stay cool!!

sammyjo

Heh. :P Interesting.

Y'know, the only thing that irks me about this story is how mean Sena is. I don't like him being the next Hiruma'it's just not like him. I can see him thinking slightly bad things about people, but Sena is generally a nice guy, without an evil bone in his body.

Calling Suzuna a *, even in his head, is something he'd never do. At all. Seriously, I don't think that's a good sign for the relationship later on, down the road.