E-e-e-ee-e-e-e-e-e--e

Sorry it has taken me so long to review this, I am behind on my reading! D=

This is great! I'm all fangirly! *flail*

The whole scene with Basch and Ashe has a perfect tension to it. (hahhah when Basch sneezed I totally laughed! Basch sneezing! What a cute thought.)

I loved Basch's memory of home and his loving mother (waking to Ashe stroking his hair was just...GAH) Really good stuff.

and the boy and the sickness...oh!

I can't wait for the next chapter!

~Georgia~

Oho. so that was the other part of it... FANSERVICE (from Ashe to Basch hahaha) just kidding. (though yeah, Basch enjoyed that one, I bet.)

It's getting more interesting. Although I must say, kids are getting freakier these days (and I blame Baschashe/Amy for that) I hope to read more soon, and the Coren Hunt is a nice title, but really, I had nothing against the old title, but yeah, I suppose you're right. This title seems to be more appropriate.

Sorry I only got to read this now!

But I LOVE chapter 3. HAHAHAHA. that part where Basch wanted to kill Ashe, that was classic! hahaha. (He's like a mother-hen!) Although I think Ashe was doing it more for herself when she put him to sleep to watch over him or something than doing it for Basch. He wouldn't be able to see anyth-... nevermind. Hahahaha

Off to the next chapter!

HURRAH!

First off...I am honoured that you mentioned my style of writing and that you think highly of me. *blushes*

A great little chapter! XD No...not great, amazing. You have pulled off yet another brilliant fascinating addition!

I loved how Basch remembered his past, with his mother reading him stories to him and Noah. (And yes, I really thought the confusion of who was Basch/Who was Noah was a great detail! It certainly made me smile!) It's things like that which really make more to story...don't ever forget those gems!

Everose! Oh what has she done??! She sounds positively nasty and I'm eager to find out what her part in all of this is!

Vaan is perfect too! His listening in is exactly the sort of thing he would do and as for Fran calling him "little thief" that made me smile as well! (Again, the details make it so much more enjoyable!)

Poor Tobiah...I dread to think what is happening to him. Basch will save him...I know he will! XD

Basch sneeze! I really laughed at that! How wonderful a sound that would be! (silly fangirling thoughts there.)

Well, that last scene...oh! Basch is certainly struggling with his inner thoughts (nice work of the two sides of him arguing there!) but it's not easy with Ashe all wet and glistening! She would never mind Basch looking at him...he's not Balthier or Vaan. XD

You are just absolutely amazing! This was a wonderful thing to read when I came home! I look forward to the next update!

Hurrah!! XD Amy.

E-E-E-e-E!

Basch is so knighly and protective! I love the way you write the interaction between them, she is huffy and full of pride and he is calm- trying to hold back his smile...JUST AWESOME.

Wow! That was unexpected and exciting! I think he will remember this birthday as well (maybe for having Ashe clinging to his body even more than the jump!). :P Gotta love it when Basch gets wet huh?

"When you toy with death you toy with a Nation." How very Basch.

Ashe is so naughty! ohh...Basch's hair in her lap...GAH!

Scary shape at top of waterfall! *gasp*

Chapter was short but sweet. I look forward to more Basch/Ashe and more of this plot!

~Famke~

More Basch/Ashe, plot be damned (or at least do both)!

Oh Wow! XD Another update...short...but of GREAT quality! XD

I can just picture the two of them leaping off the top of the waterfall! It's so enchanting! you really do know how to make me grin so widely...you know how to make such an elated feeling in your readers!

It's beautiful gem...as always and in response to your question at the end...both! More Basch/Ashe and moving with the plot! I really can't wait!!

But I shall have to.

Thank you so much for this! It's amazing!

Duskshard!

E-E-E-E-E-E-E-E-E-E-E-E!

This was so awesome!

You have left me very fangirlie and flailing! I never tired of the multitude of ways that your described Basch's gorgeous physique! Gah!

And the tention you infuse into the way Ashe can feel Basch looking at her...and him in her bed! His scars...

and.. Vaan and Penelo are playing sneaky little matchmakers! I love that!

and still I remember the intersting plot from chapter one and I look very much forward to seeing what happens next.

Thank you for this! It is a GEM! *goes into faves for sure*

~Famke~

LAME? Lame?

Hey that is not true! As a profound Basch/Ashe lover, that opening chapter alone got me in such a happy buzzed daze that I had to pause before continuing!

This is great chapter! And hurrah for Vaan and Penny for putting Ashe in the same bed as Basch! *sigh*

You really had me going with the way you described Basch and I was as giddy as a school girl! The butterfly thing was sweet as well, and all of it was pure gold!

Everose...suspicious of her all ready! But I am really excited and I want you to continue this. PLEASE! You have made this fangirl's day!

Oh, I am interested! =)

OHO i can smell injuries in the air... or not. hahaha. This is really interesting. Hm... I wonder how they'd manage to get the spell and what they'd do with it.

I'm looking forward to the next chapters.

there are some typos though, you might want to check them out. But it's not that much of a biggie. Just edit it when you have time. haha. that's what I do. I always have errors in my fics and I only realize it when it's too late! So don't despair! Chapter 1 is great! Hope to read more soon.

I finally had the time to read this through and let a review as promised :) I liked this beginning, it looks promising, though my favorite bits were the ones that Penelo, Vaan and Balthier behaved like true children :D and I think Ashe would like to join them, if not for once :)

And when I read the "Esper" word my eyes widened. I love a good tale about Espers, I find that they are an amazing addiction for FFXII and, of course, having Basch/Ashe at the main subject, makes my day. I am very curious about this beast now, and the spell he carries. So, I will be sure to follow this story so, please, update! :D

First off, your writing is not rubbish. :)

I am very engrossed in this plot! It's certainly making me want to have more to read, and I love your style!

Its not going to be a romantic Basch/Ashe? Or did I get it wrong? :(

Either way, I liked how Basch noticed Ashe whilst the others were playing. (loved the teens...been drinking have they? Naughty!) liked this sentence:

"Basch glanced at Ashe before speaking, looking for approval. She gave a tiny nod." Permission to speak, princess? XD

But not as much as: "Basch's heart soared as it always did to see such a rare display of sheer happiness on the Princess' face." You do write those gem moments!

Though I am concerned about this whole hunt! Might it be a trap of some kind? There has to be a twist!

Well done Basch for coming to Penny's aid! *LOL* I could see so clearly Basch tipping Vaan into the sea like that! Great moment!

Bring on more! XD

Your skills are very far from rubbish!

You have a very poetic, descriptive writing style that I like very much.

Heheh ashe binds his injuries too tight- that sounds perfectly like Ashe. :)

The part where you describe the three playing around by the fire is really cute, though I think it would match your writing style better if you omitted the slang phrases like "egged on" and "monkeying" around.

"The others had long given up their attempts to involve her in anything trivial."
Great sentence- it speaks volumes about the way these characters interact...and it is sad...that Ashe doesn't know how to play, yet she is almost as young as Penelo. :(


"He was glad when she turned and smiled at him briefly. It felt like yesterday when he had sat beside her on a night like this and she had frozen stiff as though turned to ice, not to thaw for hours."
Nice Metaphor... again the poetic style- I really like it.

I noticed a few run-on sentences (like I can talk- I am the worst when it comes to run-ons) it comes with the descriptive type writing I suppose.

Interesting story, the old woman, the mark and the ancient arcane spell... all intrigue me.

I am looking forward to more of this tale- Great work!

~Famke~

Ooh, this is sounding interesting!

I loved the snippets of Vaan, Penelo and Balthier. And I loved that you made Balthier act childish along with Vaan and Penny! It's different.

Poor Vaan at the end, XD

Anyway, I'm really looking forward to a next chapter! Though update at your own pace XD

~Feeny