Awesome!And weren't you on IGN typing a Pikmin story where 30 dudes crash on the planet and get killed off.Like, your name is the same.Oh, yeah. You left there forever, right?

9/10. I thought you forgot about this Sarsars.

really nice "ima huntin me some shrooms" best quote EVER

I love you. This is awsome. You are a genieous. I know i spelled that horribly wrong but i don't care first Rebellion then this. You have to make sequals. My friend will love you too for this. I finally found an awsome pikmin story. Yay ^_^

Coolness.Update soon please, seeing as this story is actually good and action oriented. But I agree with the guy a post before me, your grammar is kind of hard to understand. Good story though! UPDATE!

"Mary Sue... is a pejorative term used to describe a fictional character who plays a major role in the plot and is particularly characterized by overly idealized and clichéd mannerisms, lacking noteworthy flaws..."

I hardly think Jason can be called a 'Mary Sue'. He is not particularly mature, and his lack of Olimar's strength can certainly be called a 'noteworth flaw'.

I've always hated mary-sue stories... but if there was ever one that could convince me to read them, it would be this. Of course, the story is riddled with errors ("take the engine to the engine", is one), and it all seems (seemed) too bland with everything being controlled like a game. Then there was the gust of wind (took me a minute to understand that) and the giant hand, which took me from "Blegh. This is an average story, it's been done before," to "Woah! Unexpected twist! Well cultivated."

Now... Where is Chapter 7!?

cool

wow how much sense did that make? either way it was still a good chapter

Awesome job i didn't think these fics could e good but you've done GREAT so far update soon! :)

Good story. However, if I were Olimar, I would have punched you several times throughout. :)

Anyway, continue writing this please. It's very engaging.

W00T QUICK UPDATES!

Sincerely,
DSPR

first review on this chapter =D great chap[ter i lolled at the girly shriek part good work

Quite interesting

flipping sweet man great work

Hey Sarsars. 8/10