That was lovely. Edward is as edward as it is possible to be, and elena is lovable.

you still have the magic girl.

ZOMG! That was beautiful! You should have Edward tell Bella about that and then have him play that song he was writing to her too. It would be sweet. And then at the end, you can have Edward watching Bella sleeping, having a flashback of the girl sleeping. Just a thought. Beautful. I almost cried, even though there was no reason too.

Not random at all... It was really great!! You are so going into my favourite authors list right now... lol. Seriously, you're one of the best writers I've seen on here. Keep it up! :)

Great story! I like it!

Yeah, I like the idea too. At first I was a bit hesitant, and had to check I had clicked on the right story, but then I realised what was going on. I'm so slow lol.

I loved the way you made it more realistic with the slip up. I think it shows kind of how Edward has developed, really. You see, then, he wasn't so good at lying, but he got better later in his... existance.

Maybe I should just be quiet and stop making things up about your story ;)

Anyway in case you couldn't tell, I think it's lovely. xx

Your writing has a nice flow to it. I love the description. This story is really well written! Is this a oneshot or is there more coming?

This is amazing!
I'm really jealous.
-Sarah

This is really interesting! And not random at all! I hope your continuring on with it? Its a nice point of view to see edward from:) But I wouldnt put Rosalie in for a bit, if thats what you were going to do. Wait a bit instead.
Hope to read more!Its beautifully written!
-MD-

i only read the first couple of lines but it sounds really eally good! good work ur story if fab :)