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| christinemarie13 2008-08-24 ch 1,  | abuseThis was a good story. Definitely their personalities and though its a subject a lot of people do, it had it's own personality. Its nice to see something different than just the usual and you've done that. :) |
| edwarddazzlesme17 2008-08-07 ch 1, | abuse"I hope this story was enjoyable..." Ya think? lol Great story. Loved it!! |
| Reyna White 2008-06-30 ch 1, | abuseGreat job. You did a great job of keeping them both in character. |
| Naruto-guy-lover 2008-06-26 ch 1, | abuseI chuckle at your worried babble at the end of this story. For I found that you did an exceptional job at portraying bella and how she would be so flustered and nervous. And there is nothing wrong with the gutter, you can always find nice shiny things there. |
| Nightmare and Dream 2008-06-22 ch 1, | abuseGreat! Love it! Very well written! ♥ |
| Blue-Kool-Aid 2008-06-20 ch 1, | abuseI must admit, I'm always hesitant to read fanfiction when it comes to a novel that I greatly enjoy/admire/love. But I decided to chance it (mostly because my mind was also taking a dangerous swing to the gutter side) and I'm sure glad that I did. : ) I thought that you captured Bella's perspective perfectly - kept to the elements that Stephanie Meyer endowed her with, but also gave it your own personal twist (which I thoroughly enjoyed). And Edward - well, it was just like reading him in the novel, too. : ) Fantastic work! I thoroughly enjoyed this fic - though it was rather short (but exceedingly sweet)! Congratulations on a job well done - to the favourites it goes! -Blue |
| twilight-amazing88 2008-06-18 ch 1, | abuseLove it! It is perfect for their 'fist time'!! You wrote it well! |
| Hyewon 2008-06-17 ch 1, anon. | abuseI've always wanted to read a Twilight fic, but I was so hesitant because I could never find anything that compared to Stephenie's style. Yet you've done it perfectly. It's as if this were from the fourth book itself. You've done a great job :) |
| thrufirewithoutaburn 2008-06-16 ch 1, | abuseI'd really like this story in EPOV. Or one like it. |
| hellyeahchemical 2008-06-15 ch 1, | abuseOh...wow. That was absolutely delicious. That was better than **! Who needs live ** when you've got something like this to read! That was fantastic. I can't WAIT for Edward's POV. I'm all tingly inside just thinking about it! -Lauren. xoxo |
| acireamos 2008-06-13 ch 1, | abuseGood characterization and good steamy stuff! What more can anyone ask for? |
| Bloodapple123 2008-06-13 ch 1, | abuseI think it was awesome! |
| Getaway girl 2008-06-13 ch 1, | abuseIt is really good. i liked it |
| nikkinik211 2008-06-12 ch 1, | abuseoh...my...god... this is honestly THE most amazing story I've ever read about bella and edward's first time. you did such a great job keeping the two in character. most one shots I've read are really vulgur and tasteless and compltely OOC but this one is damn near perfect. I don't think that Stephenie herself could've done a better job. please keep up the writing, I really enjoyed this! |
| angelbabe17mm 2008-06-12 ch 1, | abusei think u definitely captured that vibe. this was absolutely excellent and i look forward to the piece from edward's perspective. |