AWw, this is soo sweet! Love it :D

YEI! I LOVE NARUNARU AND KIRI!!

This is really good and i like the idea.

The first thing... Geez, it's cheesy. The second thing.. characters are waay out of line. If you need inspiration just re-read the manga.. and write what you imagine, then edit. Keep writing! ;)

it's pretty good...

Aw so Ochiai got Aoyama but Kiri got Shogo! WRITE MORE PLEASE for these two couples!

IT WAZ GOOD! I LIKD IT. IT WAS NICE, BUT I WOULD'VE LIKD IT TO BE A LITTL LONGR 2 C WAT HAPPENZ, BUT ITS RELY GOOD!!

that was funny "(cough desire to save Kiri cough)"

i just had to be eating Honey bunches of oats while reading this.
i almost killed my keyboard by spitting milk on it lol.

i found the part where he "confessed" hilarious though
every time i read something really cute it makes me laugh. not in a bad way though

Narumi and Kiri were a bit out of character towards the end, but a god story nonetheless.

okokok... first things first.. IT DOES NOT SUCK AT ALL! ;O i actually loved it! It was really really cute... adorable actually! I would read this story over and over again and smile each time! ;] and if it was longer i would be obsessed! haha... it was awesome! Thanks for making my day! ;p

oh... im a hypercryte saying this but u shouldn't say that altough saying it will see ur "falts" and improve right?
well hope u wrtie more stories!

That was... random... did kiri get better? And why would Occhi want to get Narumi and Kiri together?

He likes her too. And Kiri is kind of out of character. And would YOU kiss a person that sick?

And thats a really akward way to say I love you, no offense.

And I really don't think that Kiri would say, "Does this mean we're together?" And don't forget to put commas and periods.

It sounds weird if you just say,

"Um... well because I uh have to watch out for my kohai"

Instead, say, "Um... Well, because I, uh, have to watch out for my Kohai."

Kiri's really out of character...no offense, she usually is very laid back and calm,so she wont really stammer

hey i really like this story; its not good to downplay your own stories; and people fav them cuz they like them so there,lol ^^ thanx ^-^

hey - this is a really sweet story. i could tell that you were nervous while writing it. hehe. don't worry! it was really good.^-^. please write more!