dang. That is really sad but really cool at the same time...i just dont know what to make of this...i know its good but...there is just something about it...

beautifully written, every detail of lily's thoughts was great. it was a bit dark and bleak for me, and the whole "i'm dumping you because you don't put up a fight anymore" thing was predictable, but i still really liked this. :]

"It's all a game, lovely."

My favourite line. Snape and James make quite lovely supporting characters in this, more so because of the background that you give in "gesellschaft." Gaah, I hate how I can't underline/italicize. It seems almost sinful. : (

Thank you for sharing.

~Kat

"Bellatrix sees what she wants and takes it, and if what she wants isn't perfect yet, she'll make it. She is too good at mind games, and the psyche is so easily manipulated."

Totally forgot about this line. I was thinking about it last night after I read it. It's very powerful.

I think this is one of my favorite stories of yours. (Don't get me wrong, I haven't found one yet that I haven't adored.)

The writing style you use, particularly poignant in this piece, is so raw and intense. Your words are almost like a poem that's completely true and honest to the feelings and emotions brought on in humans. The very darkest parts are the very best, with the words eating away at your heart like acid, compelling the story to have a drive that takes away your breath.

I especially liked the use of parenthesis and repetition in this piece, and how it brought to the point certain feelings and themes. They gave the reader an idea as to what you were getting at.

Apart from the structure, you have beautiful characterization. You give these characters that have practically no background information in the first place a life and a persona. In the shortness of your story compared to many books, you went more in depth into the way the characters were built than a lot of novels do.

As for my favorite line... hmm... there are so many lusciously lovely lines. Especially spoken by the twisted lips of Bellatrix. "It's all a game, lovely." For some reason, that short, little line sticks in my head because I can so CLEARLY visualize the lips moving into those words and burning Lily through the core.

I hope to one day aspire to write as eloquently as you do. I commend you once again for a stunning piece of literature.

amazing! very good how did you come up with that?

I love it. It's evil, dark and sexy. I love Bellatrix.

Brilliant story. Like this chapter the best for the interactions between the characters. Could play this scene amazingly easily in my head LOL.
Oh yea, like your writing style too, it's interesting.

This is truly an accomplishment, because I know this, I've been this...and you described, showed, what Bella did to Lily, what she took from her, and made her, utterly perfectly. I totally love you ;)

This is a part of Bella's character that I love...the insanity, the madness, the absolute and unrestrained perverted desires...I guess I'm a bit crazy too, lol. I love this, you truly have a gift for pulling the reader into the words, it was like I was literally watching it all play out in front of me. Kudos.

This is bril. I've liked Bella/Lily for so long, and it's so rare to come by a piece that's worth reading. I'm very delighted that you've turned this into a multichapter fic. I will not, I am sure, be in the slightest disappointed.

My god, I've just hardly finished the first chapter and absolutely had to tell you that, from what I've read as of yet, this is simply awesome. I've just stumbled onto this pairing and you're only but helping me to get unhealthily obsessed with it.

Well, I'm on to read the rest~

I love you! Best semi-crack!ship ever... The twisted characterisation of Bellatrix was perfect, and poor, broken Bella'sNewToy!Lily was so tragically beautiful... and unbearably cute, following Bella around like a lost kitten. She was such a devoted little toy, too... I love it! Write another one!! ~Jess

I love you! Best semi-crack!ship ever... The twisted characterisation of Bellatrix was perfect, and poor, broken Bella'sNewToy!Lily was so tragically beautiful... and unbearably cute, following Bella around like a lost kitten. She was such a devoted little toy, too... I love it! Write another one!! ~Jess

This story is...amazing, really. Sad, dark, and bitter. Very well done. I'm going to go read more of your things now. :]

-Tauphe