What a lovely little story. I adore pieces that try to deal honestly with the fact that these are war games and not happy adventure games, and the ending is nothing if not honest. The beginning, too, wherein Amelia takes stock of all the heroes she might have fixated on, really appeals to me. One flaw, though, in the line about Ephraim- "it's greatest star" should simply be "its" greatest. Other than that, well done.

Short, sad, and pleasantly without technical flaws.

God, this was sad =(
Great idea... and a really really great way to get anything out of this short moment that you could possibly get out of it. I also really liked the first 4 paragraphs, especially because at first, you don't really know what's going on and then, you suddenly understand.
I found it really shocking. Reading the last few sentences I thought "What, that's it?" and "So true." at the same time.
I love it. Thanks for this great story =)

How'd you make such a short story so GOOD? Can you teach me? This is an absolutely excellent story about the realities of war-- something I think the other fics here are sometimes a little deficient in. Well done.

Whoah... That was beautifully written. I thought you captured Amelia's feeling of trajedy and shock very well. And I love the whole undertone of irony present; that Amelia couldn't save the knight she so loved and cared for. (It was Franz, right? Poor Franz...)
The title seemed to add well to the whole irony of the story. As well as that last line. Very nicely done.

Wow. Just wow.

That was powerfully tragic, or tragically power, I don't know, maybe both. The tense change was done well and fitted the transition from past perception to present reality.

You did a great job in capturing the initial shock and disbelief of losing someone close for the first time. Oh, the ending line was just perfect.

Wow. Awesome fic! :D This was so awesome; great work, and keep it up!

Poor Amelia... *cry* And the knight was Franz, right?

Not a bad story and i don't see any glaring problems. Normally I'm more a fan of action based stories but you did a good job writing this.

Hey there, Pureauthor! I can't say much more than what everyone else already pointed out...very nicely written, and very sad as well. ;_;

Very tragic. You illustrate her grief very well. I feel like it was just the right length too: any more would have been superfluous and any less, not enough. And the end is powerful. I don't think it was melodramatic; the tragedy of the moment just took over her mind, and you can really feel that. This was a very good piece. :)
~Lemurian-Girl~

And I'm guessing the person who died was Franz? Considering how he wanted to protect her and she also wanted to protect him? And also how he's a knight "the" knight with a "gentle smile". Meh, I didn't really like Franz. Oh what a tragedy! Ahem, now that Franz is dead...I guess walking away from the rotting corpse was a good idea. Walk away Amelia! He's smelly now. Hehe. Anyway good story, the feeling of the story was brilliant...it made me chortle a bit, then choke, and then laugh insanely as I banged my head on my desk. Awesome fic!

Very nicely written.

Compelling...

Love this. Great atmosphere and everything.

Fav'd!