Great story. I'm not usually a fan of pevensie/oc romances, but this was subtly and elegantly done.

Didn't Ed her stabbed in the belly last chapter? I feel like he's talking to people and having storytime and no one is noticing that he's possibly fatally injured.

Good writing. I'm intrigued.

I like how you're getting in Ed's head. Very believable and on character.

Just finished this story in your ebook format - amazing! I love your characterizations & writing style - this is a very well done story! I love your sympathetic touch on Edmund - too many people condemn him without any compassion, even after he comes back from the White Witch. And your ending was heartbreaking - though maybe there is still hope for Edmund and Asha in the sequels? You've definitely gotten me hooked on this series. :D

As far as formatting goes, providing the pdf file made reading very easy for me, as I can't always have internet. You obviously took the time to make it an enjoyable reading experience. Thanks so much for sharing!

Okay, my three little words are:

ONTO THE SEQUEL!

Hah! Comical moment then. You used THE line.

"You girls wait at the castle. I'll get the Stag myself."

...such a sad ending though.

Awwww, how can you, CS Lewis! You always ruin every OCs' chance with any of the Pevensiew with that stupid return.

It is TIME? It cannot be TIME. the Golden Age lasted 15 years. You're missing out three of them!

How cute of Peter! I feel so proud of my little sibling too, I wish I could put all of Narnia I'm one knee for her.

Just don't tell her I published that.

Aww, aren't they sp cute and noble, risking their lives for each other's...?

I love them together... Only there are six books, and I, beginning to wonder when and how and if you'll mess it all up.

You probably will, seeing as in ten years he will have to leave and you will have to get them back together somehow.

I hope.

Okay, the battle scene? Well described.

About the woman in the end:

WHA-?

Aww, wasn't that the cutest chapter ever?

She loves him. Poor thing must be aching so badly inside...

Beautiful comparative to Jesus. So beautiful.

I mean, "If you're free of mistakes, I welcome you to start throwing stones"?

Beautiful.

And girl, get over it. Your parents fought because they wanted to. And they fought for the Witch.

And you blame Ed? It's understandable for two seconds. Then it is foolishness.

Hello-oh.

She IS running from you.

But for a good reason though.