Reviews for Hey Arnold!: Unrequited Love

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Kreepi Spicer 2008-10-04 ch 27,	abuseCute! =)
Lotusnapper 2008-10-03 ch 27,	abuseHow sweet, Arnold saves Helga! :) Very touching and emotional chapter as well :)
mpkio2 2008-10-03 ch 27,	abuseThanks for updating this! :) I thought I would never see Helga crying...especially in front of Arnold! Desperate times comes for desperate measures I guess. Please Update soon! Thank you! This story rocks!
Sal13 2008-10-03 ch 27,	abuseAw! That was so swet :3 Can't waiit till next chapter!! :D
YugiAngel 2008-10-03 ch 27,	abuseAw so cute Arnold and Helga together uppdate soon =^_^=
The J.A.M. a.k.a. Numbuh i 2008-10-02 ch 27,	abuseSo in 2 days she someone was ALWAYS in the room? And Arnold NEVER tried to get his couch out?
acosta perez jose ramiro 2008-10-02 ch 27,	abuseExtremely touching one. Yeah, Arnold deserves to know; after all, he just found Helga half-starved in his room. If replying please do it via e-mail. Thanks. Keep the good writing.
Hellerick Ferlibay 2008-10-02 ch 26,	abuseIt's already the seventh chapter since you keep Helga behind the couch. Come on, have mercy!
Well-Well 2008-10-01 ch 26,	abuseWell off the bat after a straight read-through, you have a pretty good thing going here. I like the way the story is playing out, though we're 26 chapters in and still no sign of the twist in fate that lands them on an island together… Some points that were turn offs for me. First off, you're very dialogue-intensive. I understand that you're trying to model your story after the TV show itself, but for me, I enjoy more description, more of a story-like manner, and less of the line by line dialogue between two, or even three people. Of course, that's my own opinion. Second, your chapters are incredibly… short. Readers won't mind waiting the extra time it takes to put more than 700 words in a chapter. (I'm using 700 as an average, though I know your word count varies. Put some meat in there! You have a lot of potential.) Third, I've noticed you borrow some of your dialogue, i.e. Helga's musings about Arnold, from the show itself. Though this does help put your characters in character, it would have been nicer if you had constructed original speeches. Speaking of characters, my first comment will be about Gerald. Gerald is neither so judging nor so mean as you make him out to be. He likes Phoebe, remember? Surly Phoebe has put her two cents in about Helga and the kind of person she is. Phoebe knows even better than Arnold that Helga has a good side to her. And Gerald and Arnold have been through enough together to understand either of their feelings. My second character comment is about Lila. Now I'm all for the Lila bashing, considering this is a H/A fic, but Lila being evil? Plotting demonic revenge against Helga because she's stealing Arnold away from her? Sorry, but I can't get behind that. I mean, yes Lila's miss perfect, and Helga certainly might have similar fantasies about Lila's character as you've written, but I cannot see how Lila's being written in character at all. My last note will be one on grammar. There are little mistakes here and there, but the one that's popping up continually throughout your chapters is the vile 'to' and 'too' problem. So here's Well-Well's grammar lesson of the day: 'Too' has two major meanings as far as I know. The first is equivalent to 'as well' or 'also.' Here are some examples: 'He has that car too.' 'Me too!' 'Is not! Is too!' The second major meaning that I know of is used in emphasis: 'He has too many cars.' Not just many cars, -too- many. 'That guy is too tall to fit through that door.' Not just tall, too tall. 'Too bad!' Not just bad, too bad. 'To' has a simple rule. If 'too' doesn't fit, use 'to.' You can also think of 'to' as a connector. If we decide 'to' go 'to' the store, the first 'to' is connecting 'We decide' and 'go,' and the second connects 'go' and 'the store.' So I hope this has helped you in some way. I hope you continue to write and boost your skills. Whatever you do, keep writing. ~Well-Well
mpkio2 2008-10-01 ch 26,	abuseHow will Helga get out? Those poems are very good; how did you write such good poetry? Please update whenever you can! :)
acosta perez jose ramiro 2008-09-30 ch 26,	abuseHelga is doing poetry while trapped... typical, but works to keep her sane; at least, as sane as she can be. And I was right; Cinderella. If replying please do it via e-mail. My server is failing. Thanks. Keep the good writing.
acosta perez jose ramiro 2008-09-30 ch 25,	abuseAh... Cinderella's factor enters the equation, uh? If replying please do it via e-mail. My server is failing. Thanks. Keep the good writing.
The J.A.M. a.k.a. Numbuh i 2008-09-30 ch 26,	abuseExcellent poem. This is getting better!! But why didn't she leave when Arnold wasn't in the room?
Lotusnapper 2008-09-30 ch 26,	abuseAww sweet, but I hope Helga doesn't die behind a couch and that maybe Arnold finds out the identity of his secret admirer, somehow. Very well written as well.
mpkio2 2008-09-30 ch 25,	abuseShort...but sweet. Yeah, I remember that episode; it was funny and cute! :) UPDATE SOON! :D

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