loved the story! :) ok, so im gonna go find the second part now...!

cant wait for the sequel *bounces in excitement*

OMG, Alton Towers! LOVED going there when I lived in England. Ah, memories . . . :)

great story

I really like this story. I haven't read one where Harry has a twin on the same side as him. It's refreshing.

I also like the way you don't just concentrate on Harry and Draco, but also on Ana. I can understand how some people would be impatient and just skip those parts, but I think it lends the story depth and insight. It shows that you have actually thought about the plot.

I think it's great how Ana doesn't go to the same school as Draco and Harry - seperating them is a good idea.

I for one completely disagree with part of what 'shiadren' posted as a reply. I think you should keep Ana being powerful. Afterall, you can't always have Harry as the best-thing-that's-happened-since-sliced-bread. It tends to make stories the same-old. However, having an OC as a main character is what kept me reading this story if I'm honest.

Another thing I like about this story is the way you have concentrated on what happened before everyone went to school. There aren't many stories that do this, and I love that you have the entire first story before they go off to school.

However, you do need to keep your tenses the same. You have a tendency to switch between present and past tenses, which can put readers off. I would be careful that you keep to only one tense - the best tense is probably the past for writing stories.

So, now I've finished this pretty long review, the main thing I have to say is just to keep writing. You have a great style, and and even better plot. xD

Thanks
Kryztol Thorn

great story :)

'Don't ferret, Lucius.'

Typo or Freudian slip? ;)

The only ting i don't get is "Why would Draco get paid" staying at his own Hotel??

Sincerely,

I just love this new version of Draco, Harry, and even *Ana*..I don't like or want to use the word trio to desribel them becuz, the 3 are better then that..

Love the Ice Phoenix thou!! The puppy is different..I hope you don't spend the sequel writing canon HP and all 7 rys, that would be cliche and suck!!

Sincerly,

I mean honestly, who cares where Ana goes..It doesn't matter..You shouldnt' be affected by readers this much..The story is great so far..

Sincerely,

God, is Ana going to be the weakest link of the 3?? She's looking more and more like a useless, spoiled weapon..

I mean, it's NOT all fun and games and I'm starting to not like her after the last chapter!!


Sincerely,

I was enjoying this story but when I sae that knowitall whore, I'd started having reservations about this storry..Can't you NOT have her or even focus on her/? What bitch of a character..

Great story so far and I like the idea of Draco, Harry and the sister..

Sincrely,

Although I like the story concept, your story has MAJOR flaws. One, we find ourselves focusing on Ana more than Harry, and in the summery you said Harry was going to be the more powerful one. It seems to me that you are making Ana more powerful than him, which I don't like AT ALL. OC characters are good in a story, but not as main characters. Whether you think so or not, Ana is quickly becoming the main character of the story, and most people, including myself, don't like that. Secondly, your grammar is atrocious. You change tenses so much that it is confusing. Either choose to write the story in past tense or present tense, don't keep flip-flopping. A good story-line, but other than that, it needs serious work. I'd reccommend focusing your attention back to Harry, and getting a beta for this story.

ok it took me a wile to read but i am sick and spent half of my day sleeping with this said i loved it it was nothing like i expcted i loved how u went in deateal of there childhood (before school) where most storys skip this stuff cant wait to read the other!!

okay i no the story is compleate but i wanted to go on with the review on the first chapter so here it goes... really good i love the idea and i so call that the chosen one is not who they think it is but its drako ok there