Excellent! I just watched Gamera 3 and this would be a fine conclusion.

no critique here only thing that should've added was taking hayata out for a beer

Not a bad one-shot deal, I'll say that much. This should definitely go to KWC page on . Just my opinion, of course, but still.

Pretty good oneshot. I've never seen Gamera 3 either, so I can't comment on the people. Ultraman was done well, but he's got only a bajillion other attacks to use. Gamera was also good, and the final blowup was well done. But the final paragraph is a bit of a run-on sentence.

Not a bad story. I did like the relationship that quickly built between Gamera and Ultraman. They both recognized one another as comrades-in-arms. I think you had some good descriptions of the battle, but more could have been added to give the reader a feel of what a melee it was. Let the reader feel the pain from numerous strikes and the heat from explosions and the fury of being surrounded by flapping wings and screeches and laser beams.

A couple typos I spotted: "their was a" should be "there was a"

"as a individual" should be "as an individual"

Keep on writing.

nice and commendable battle sequence. however, its a little worrying (to me, no need to fret) that our old man hayata saying “And you’d be surprised as to how glad you may want me here.” it seems almost as if hayata's kinda bit too proud in saying that. And why is the specium ray fired in an L config, not a plus config? anyways i still like the battle sequence, good to read some toku crossovers now and then :)

An impressive crossover story that you have here and I can easily picture how this would play out in a motion picture and all that. It even helps me more in the fact that I've recently been watching a bit of the different Ultraman shows on youtube.

Well done.

interesting, excpecially baecause i've never seen this ultraman freak, except for 1 maybe 2 times, (clappin)

pretty good, I liked it how you made it look where Gamera 3 left off, nice job