Oh, I've got a good feeling about this one.

Myst is hard to write a good fic for because it's far from interactive, at least where the characters are concerned.

Revelation was my favorite from the series and I like what you're doing with it so far. I really hope you keep going.

Ah, I can already see the improvement! Keep working on it!

As far as the voting system goes: It usually doesn't work. The most important thing for any fanfic is this: What do *you* want to happen? That's the point of fanfic, isn't it?

But, for my imput . . . I love both brothers to death, so I'd love to see both of them redeemed. But that's just my thing XD It's your fanfic, after all!

Wow! I wasn't too sure about this story when I read the prologue, but now I'm totally hooked! One minor beef: the story seems to be lacking a lot of interesting description. Other than that, good job so far! I can't wait for the next chapter!