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| Cody Furlong 2008-08-13 ch 2,  | abuseI agree with Uly,it's a good story but could use some work. |
| ulyferal 2008-07-25 ch 2, | abuseIt sounds like a very interesting story but its incredibly hard to read. It should have been broken up into conversational form instead of these huge blocks of packed paragraphs. It's really a terrible way to write and impossible for the casual reader to want to try and wade through. This is not the proper way to do POV either. For such a great horror story this really needs help. |
| Kim Dreamcatcher 2008-06-18 ch 1, | abuseYour story sounds interesting so far. Can't wait to read more. |