Really sweet one shot!

nice fic! :P

Although this was a little cheesy (Like... everything seymour did...), it was very cute. I like the whole idea of "what if's" when it comes to tidus and yuna living in a world closer to our own, it's the exact type of story i enjoy writing as well. What i think you need to work on, however is your discriptions of actions and emotions, i think this story would have been more relatable if you'd put the first part up to the bus where he sees her in yuna's p.o.v (1st person), and then wehn he catches sight of her switch to his.

also gramatically speaking you have these charecters saying things in their heads without quotations or italics, and then again you're discribing everything else in third person ominicient. If you want to have the charecters discribe their settings, you need to use structure like this:

"I shivered at all the strange, lower class people on the vehicle, counting downt he seconds in my head until my stop. This sort of situation should have made me angry. My prom date, Seymour Guado, had promised to pick me up for the prom in a hover-limo, and yet, here i was, gazing out at the lights of the city through the window of a grubby aeroway car."

Instead of:

"She shivered at all the strange, lower class people on the vehicle, counting down the seconds in her head until her stop. This sort of situation should have made her angry. Her prom date, Seymour Guado, had promised to pick her up for the prom in a hover-limo, and yet, here she was, gazing out at the lights of the city through the window of a grubby aeroway car."

and then after changing the point of view inner dialog like "Looks like she could use some comforting, heh. Wonder why she’s so sad?" without quotations and italics (I realize they're bolded... and that just seems a little distracting.), anyway's it would fit in better I think

I just thought i'd try to give you a little advice, i thought the idea for the story was pretty cute, awesome, fluffy and creative. I hope you keep writing and developing your talents.

Aww! That was so adorable!! Nice job, Noelle! You wrote it really well and it's super cute! I like the plot, too. Hehe, Seymour got totally owned. Haha.